Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition (e.g., avoid saying "places" twice) and correct small grammar issues ("taking it in aesthetic manner" → "taking them in an aesthetic way"). Use a linking phrase to add a detail or reason.

例: Yes, I do. Whenever I visit a new place, I like to photograph different landscapes and scenes, and I try to capture them in an aesthetic way. For example, when I visited a riverside town last year, I spent time taking shots at sunrise to catch the soft light and reflections.

提案: Answer more directly and avoid hesitations (like "uh"). Give a clear preference and explain with specific contrastive reasons. Complete your final thought—the current answer trails off. Use linking words (however, although, for example) to make the comparison coherent.

例: It depends, but I usually prefer rural views because they offer natural landscapes and peaceful scenes. For example, at beaches and mountains I enjoy wide horizons and quiet surroundings, whereas urban views are more about architecture and busy streets; however, I also appreciate cityscapes when the architecture is interesting.

提案: Begin with a direct statement about your situation, then provide specific supporting details about what you like within your country. Avoid repeating the same idea twice ("didn't get the opportunity" and "don't have the experience"). Use a linking word to add a positive point about your domestic travels.

例: I haven't had the chance to travel abroad yet, so I can only compare places within my country. I enjoy visiting different regions here because each has unique landscapes and cultural sights; for instance, I like going to historical towns and coastal areas to photograph traditional architecture and sea views.

× I try to take pictures of different landscapes of the places and I love taking it in aesthetic manner.

✓ I try to take pictures of the different landscapes of places and I love taking them in an aesthetic manner.

The original sentence has several issues: 'landscapes of the places' is awkward—use 'the different landscapes of places' or simply 'different landscapes'; 'taking it' incorrectly uses singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'pictures', so use 'them'; 'in aesthetic manner' is missing an article and sounds unnatural—use 'in an aesthetic manner'. Suggestion: match the pronoun number to the noun and include appropriate articles and natural collocations. Grammar problem type ID:8

× For example, if I visit uh, sea, beaches or mountains, then I love to explore the rural areas and I enjoy the views of rural areas.

✓ For example, if I visit the sea, beaches or mountains, I love to explore the rural areas and enjoy their views.

The original sentence has redundant phrasing and punctuation issues: unnecessary filler 'uh' should be removed in writing; 'sea' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the sea in general; repeating 'rural areas' and 'I enjoy the views of rural areas' is repetitive—replace with 'enjoy their views'; 'then' is unnecessary after 'if' in this context. Suggestion: remove fillers, use articles correctly, avoid repetition, and streamline sentence flow. Grammar_problem_type_id:26

× But when I visit places like Rajshahi.

✓ But when I visit places like Rajshahi, I prefer urban or rural views depending on the area.

This original fragment is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause (no finite verb completing the thought). It ends abruptly with a dependent clause 'But when I visit...'. To correct it, attach a main clause that completes the idea, for example stating preference or action when visiting such places. Suggestion: always ensure subordinate clauses are followed by an independent clause to form a complete sentence. Grammar_problem_type_id:23

× I didn't get the opportunity to visit foreign countries.

✓ I haven't had the opportunity to visit foreign countries.

Using simple past 'didn't get' suggests a finished time reference, but the speaker speaks about life experience up to now; present perfect 'haven't had' is more appropriate to indicate lack of experience so far. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences that continue to the present. Grammar_problem_type_id:5

× That's why I don't have the experience of visiting foreign lands.

✓ That's why I don't have any experience of visiting foreign countries.

The phrase 'the experience of visiting foreign lands' is awkward and slightly nonstandard; 'any experience of visiting foreign countries' is more natural. Also 'lands' is less idiomatic than 'countries.' Suggestion: use 'any' to indicate absence of experience and prefer 'countries' for clarity. Grammar_problem_type_id:26

× But I do have opportunities to visit multiple places in my country and I love visiting this.

✓ But I have had opportunities to visit many places in my country, and I love visiting them.

'I do have opportunities' is acceptable but 'have had opportunities' or 'have opportunities' depending on intended tense—present perfect 'have had' better matches 'I haven't visited foreign countries' context. 'multiple' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural. Crucially, 'visiting this' uses an incorrect demonstrative pronoun 'this' to refer to plural 'places'—use 'them'. Suggestion: match pronouns to their antecedents in number and use natural quantifiers and tense consistency. Grammar_problem_type_id:12