Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and article use, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I usually photograph landscapes such as mountains, rivers and city skylines because I enjoy capturing different atmospheres. For example, I once photographed a misty mountain at sunrise to show the peaceful mood.

提案: Make the response grammatical and coherent. Begin with a clear preference sentence, give a reason and one specific detail or example. Avoid unclear phrases and awkward metaphors. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I grew up in Seoul and feel connected to the city. For example, I enjoy photographing the skyline and busy streets at dusk because the lights and colors make me feel energetic.

提案: Correct grammar and expand with a specific reason and example. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., ‘keen on’ -> ‘keen on traveling’), and give a concrete example of a view you liked abroad. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I love traveling with my family and seeing new landscapes. For example, I enjoyed the beaches and mountains around Waikiki, where the ocean sunsets were very beautiful and different from home.

× I normally taking a picture of Landis Gulf such as mountains, rivers and cities skyline because I enjoy taking a different atmosphere and like to conditions.

✓ I normally take pictures of landscapes such as mountains, rivers, and city skylines because I enjoy capturing different atmospheres and conditions.

The sentence uses incorrect verb form 'taking' after the adverb 'normally'; the simple present requires base verb 'take' for habitual actions (Grammar problem type 8). Also plural nouns and word choices were improved: 'Landis Gulf' is unclear so replaced with 'landscapes'; 'picture' -> 'pictures' (plural to match general habit) and 'cities skyline' -> 'city skylines'. Use 'capturing' to collocate with 'atmospheres and conditions'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and correct '-ing' forms after verbs that require gerunds only when appropriate.

× I prefer view in urban area.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas.

The original omits articles and pluralization. When speaking generally about types of places, use plural 'views' and plural 'urban areas' or include articles 'the' if specific (Grammar problem type 22). Suggestion: say 'I prefer views in urban areas' or 'I prefer the view in urban areas' depending on meaning.

× That is because I'm born and bred in Seoul so I usually watch it.

✓ That is because I was born and raised in Seoul, so I am used to it.

'I'm born and bred' incorrectly uses present simple passive where past simple passive is required for a past event (Grammar problem type 6). Also 'watch it' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'used to it' or 'familiar with it'. Suggestion: use 'was born and raised' for past facts and 'used to it' for being accustomed.

× A sky scope scribble and colorful nails eye view.

✓ The sky looks dramatic and colorful, which gives a lively view.

The original is a fragment and uses nonsensical word combinations like 'sky scope scribble' and 'colorful nails eye view' (Grammar problem type 26). This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Suggestion: rewrite clearly with subject and verb and use standard collocations such as 'the sky looks dramatic' or 'a colorful skyline'.

× It makes me feel more energetic and excited.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic and excited.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'makes me feel' uses appropriate verb construction and -ing is not required (Grammar problem type 8). No change needed.

× I would say I'm more likely to prefer view in other countries.

✓ I would say I'm more likely to prefer views in other countries.

'Prefer view' needs plural 'views' to express a general preference and 'prefer' with 'would say' should keep base form; the main issue is noun number (Grammar problem type 8). Suggestion: use 'views' for general preferences and 'in other countries' as phrase.

× That is because I really keen on traveling with my family so I really like other countries view such as Waikiki.

✓ That is because I am really keen on traveling with my family, so I really like views of other countries, such as Waikiki.

Missing auxiliary 'am' with adjective 'keen' is incorrect; 'keen on' requires a form of 'to be' (Grammar problem type 6). Also 'other countries view' should be 'views of other countries' and include commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I am keen on traveling' and pluralize 'views' or say 'the views of other countries'.