Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng cần chính xác về thì và rút gọn để tránh dài dòng. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'I spent' thay vì 'I spend'), và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về một cảnh hoặc chi tiết bạn chụp để tăng độ thuyết phục.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially while traveling. On my last trip to Japan, I spent hours photographing the gardens in Kyoto because I liked the contrast between the bright maple leaves and the old wooden teahouses. These shots help me remember the atmosphere and small details of each place.

提案: Cần tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (ví dụ 'seascape' không phù hợp nếu nói về thành phố; 'neon lead' sai). Câu bị dang dở và thiếu rõ ràng. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sửa từ vựng cho phù hợp (neon-lit streets, skyline), hoàn thành câu ví dụ cụ thể và giới hạn 3–4 câu. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy city lighting and diverse architecture. For instance, in Tokyo I loved the neon-lit streets and the dramatic skyline of Shinjuku, which made night photography especially interesting. The constant variety of scenes keeps me inspired.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng chứa lỗi nghiêm trọng về từ vựng và ý (ví dụ 'living in bed' vô nghĩa; 'Chiang Kuang' không rõ). Cần sửa những lỗi sai này, trả lời trực tiếp và bổ sung một hoặc hai cụ thể địa danh nổi bật ở Việt Nam. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu và dùng liên từ để rõ ràng hơn.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting. I was born and raised here, so I know many beautiful places such as Ha Long Bay with its limestone karsts and Hoi An with its well-preserved ancient streets. These familiar scenes are meaningful to me and easy to photograph.

× For example, on my latest trip to Japan, I spend a lot of time photographing landscapes and local architecture because I enjoy capturing unique details and memories.

✓ For example, on my latest trip to Japan, I spent a lot of time photographing landscapes and local architecture because I enjoyed capturing unique details and memories.

The sentence refers to a past trip ('latest trip to Japan'), so the verbs should be in past tense. Use 'spent' and 'enjoyed' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame mentioned, e.g., use past forms when describing completed past events.

× OK, so I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lighting, seascape and the variety of sights such as neon lead streets and modern skyscrapers.

✓ OK, so I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lighting, seascapes and the variety of sights such as neon-lit streets and modern skyscrapers.

The nouns and modifiers need correct number and word formation: 'seascape' should be plural 'seascapes' to match 'lighting' and 'variety of sights'; 'neon lead streets' is incorrect phrasing—use 'neon-lit streets' to describe streets illuminated by neon signs. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and pluralize countable nouns when listing multiple kinds or examples.

× For example, when I visited Japan, I spent half my trip in Tokyo and I lived in Tokyo, Sakai and.

✓ For example, when I visited Japan, I spent half my trip in Tokyo and I also lived in Sakai and other places.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('I spent half my trip in Tokyo and I lived in Tokyo, Sakai and.'), leaving an unfinished list. Fix by removing repetition and completing the list or generalizing it ('Sakai and other places'). Suggestion: avoid repeating the same location and ensure lists are completed or replaced with a clear summary.

× I was born here and I have been living in bed now for almost 30 years, so I know many beautiful places.

✓ I was born here and I have been living here for almost 30 years, so I know many beautiful places.

'Living in bed' is a lexical error—likely meant 'living here'. The present perfect continuous 'have been living' is correct to indicate a situation that started in the past and continues to the present; keep it but correct 'bed' to 'here'. Suggestion: choose the correct adverb ('here') to reflect location; use present perfect continuous for actions continuing to present.

× Vietnam offers a mix of bustling modern cities and Chiang Kuang.

✓ Vietnam offers a mix of bustling modern cities and scenic countryside areas such as Chiang Kuang.

The original pairs 'bustling modern cities and Chiang Kuang' create an imbalance because Chiang Kuang is a specific place and the parallel structure is unclear. Clarify by making both items comparable: 'bustling modern cities and scenic countryside areas such as Chiang Kuang.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure in lists and make items comparable (both general types or both specific examples).