Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and give one or two specific examples with a brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunrises and sunsets because the light and colors change quickly, creating memorable scenes. I also keep these photos as reminders of special moments.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: state your preference in one sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Remove repetitions and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'a rural areas'). Use a linking word to add the reason.

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I love natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing forests and fields where there are fewer people and more wildlife, which makes the photos feel peaceful.

提案: Be concise and avoid contradictory phrases. State your main preference, give a brief reason with a specific detail, then optionally mention interest in foreign views. Remove fillers and correct grammar ('most prettiest' → 'most beautiful', 'been only on in two countries' → 'only been to two countries').

例: I prefer the views in my country because I think it has many beautiful landscapes, such as coastal cliffs and mountain valleys I grew up near. However, I'm also curious about views abroad because I've only been to two other countries and want to see different scenery.

× I love taking pictures of everything about, especially the different views like sunset or sunrise, and I love to, uh, keep photos as a memory.

✓ I love taking pictures of everything, especially different views like sunsets or sunrises, and I like to keep photos as memories.

Use of 'about' is unnecessary and incorrect here; remove it. 'Sunset or sunrise' should be plural when speaking generally: 'sunsets or sunrises.' 'I love to keep photos as a memory' is awkward: prefer 'I like to keep photos as memories.' Also maintain consistent verb choice (love/like) for natural phrasing.

× I would like to say I'll prefer views in a rural areas because rural is like similar to the nature and I I'm a lover of nature and I really love to take pictures of them.

✓ I would say I prefer views in rural areas because rural places are closer to nature, and I'm a lover of nature so I really love to take pictures of them.

'a rural areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas'—remove 'a' or use singular: 'a rural area.' 'Rural is like similar to the nature' is ungrammatical: use 'rural places are closer to nature' or 'rural areas are similar to nature.' Also remove repeated filler 'I I'm.' Ensure plural agreement between 'rural areas' and 'them.'

× Actually, I prefer views in my country because my country, uh, in my opinion, my country has uh, the most prettiest views in the world, but also I would like to uh, see the views in other countries because I have been only on in two countries.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in my country because, in my opinion, my country has the prettiest views in the world, but I would also like to see views in other countries because I have only been to two countries.

'The most prettiest' is incorrect: use either 'the prettiest' or 'more pretty' but not both; here 'the prettiest' is correct. 'I have been only on in two countries' has preposition and word order errors: use 'I have only been to two countries.' Also move 'also' to natural position: 'I would also like.'