Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g., “taking pictures,” “I like to use my camera,” “so I can remember them”). Use linking words like “because” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember special moments. For example, when I visit a scenic spot I use my own camera to capture the colors and composition so I can look back on them later.

提案: Answer directly with correct grammar and add one specific reason. Use a topic sentence then provide a linked supporting detail with words like “because” or “for example.” Correct plural/singular and prepositions (e.g., “in urban areas,” “walking across streets,” “different buildings”).

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the variety of architecture and busy streets. For example, I like walking along avenues to see modern towers, old facades, and vibrant street life, which gives me interesting photo opportunities.

提案: Stay on topic and correct vocabulary (use “views” not “movies”) and grammar. Start with a clear statement, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid repetition and fragmented phrases.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more familiar with the landscapes and culture. For example, I enjoy photographing local festivals and traditional neighborhoods since I understand their history and can interact with people more easily.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking picture when I see different interesting things or beautiful views and I like to using use my own camera to capture something can make me remember later.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures when I see different interesting things or beautiful views, and I like to use my own camera to capture things that can help me remember later.

Errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (count noun) — relates also to singular/plural but corrected under verb+-ing context for activity; 'to using use' has an incorrect infinitive/gerund combination — should be 'to use' after 'like'; 'something can make me remember later' is unidiomatic and missing relative clause — changed to 'things that can help me remember later'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund for activities, use 'like to + base verb' for preferences, make nouns plural when general, and use relative clauses ('that') for clarification.

× I prefer views in urban area because I really love to across different building in the street.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I really love to walk across different buildings in the streets.

Errors: 'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' when speaking generally; 'across different building' has pluralization error 'building' -> 'buildings'; also sentence used wrong verb 'across' without a verb — corrected to 'walk across'. Suggestion: use plural forms for general preferences and ensure nouns agree in number with determiners and verbs.

× I prefer views in urban area because I really love to across different building in the street.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I really love to walk across different buildings in the streets.

Error: 'to across' is incorrect; 'across' is a preposition and cannot follow 'to' as an infinitive. Suggestion: use a verb such as 'walk' or 'go' before 'across' (e.g., 'walk across') or use 'move across' / 'see across' depending on intended meaning.

× I really prefer movies in my own country 'cause my own country is more familiar for me and I was born in there, so I love it.

✓ I really prefer views in my own country because my own country is more familiar to me and I was born there, so I love it.

Errors: 'movies' is likely wrong word; context asks about views, so use 'views' not 'movies' — also 'in there' is incorrect; use 'there' without 'in'. 'Familiar for me' should be 'familiar to me'. Suggestions: choose the correct noun matching context, use 'familiar to someone', and avoid extra prepositions like 'in there'.

× Love it. Culture, love it's people, yeah.

✓ I love it. I love the culture and the people.

Errors: Sentence fragments lacking subject; 'it's' is a contraction meaning 'it is' but should be possessive 'its' or better rephrased as 'the people'. Suggestion: use full sentences with explicit subjects ('I love...') and use 'the' before nouns when referring to specific things like 'the culture' and 'the people'.