Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ rõ ràng: tránh lỗi cấu trúc như “the viewer in my phone” và dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: “memory” thay vì “viewer”); rút gọn câu để tự nhiên, dùng thì đúng và thêm một câu minh hoạ ngắn. Ngoài ra chú ý phát âm từ “sometimes” và chia động từ đúng (sometime s → sometimes).

例: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they help me keep memories on my phone. For example, when I travel I take photos of landscapes so I can rewatch them later and remember the trip.

提案: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và logic: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh mâu thuẫn (bạn nói thích rural nhưng nhắc nhiều về phố - urban). Sử dụng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi giải thích với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: không khí, thiên nhiên, yên tĩnh). Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (because, so, for example).

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful countryside scenes and natural landscapes. For example, I like photographing quiet roads and rice fields, which feel calmer than busy city streets.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, rõ nghĩa và cụ thể hoá lý do: dùng cấu trúc đúng (e.g. “I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because…”). Tránh các cụm từ mơ hồ như “going up on everything” và “the viewer”; thay bằng lý do cụ thể (phong cảnh đa dạng, văn hóa, thay đổi đô thị). Nên đưa một ví dụ ngắn về địa điểm hoặc cảnh cụ thể.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because it offers diverse scenery and vibrant street life. For instance, I enjoy photographing the colorful markets and riverside scenery that reflect local culture and rapid development.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like to keep the moment the viewer in my phone.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like to keep the moment or the view on my phone.

The original sentence has sentence structure and word choice issues: 'keep the moment the viewer in my phone' is ungrammatical. Use either 'keep the moment' or 'keep the view' and a correct prepositional phrase 'on my phone'. Suggestion: decide whether you mean 'moment' or 'view' and use 'on my phone' to indicate where it is stored.

× Sometime I can rewatch it.

✓ Sometimes I can rewatch it.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency) instead of 'sometime'. 'Sometimes' is the correct form to indicate occasional actions. Also keep present tense 'can rewatch' which is fine.

× I prefer the views in a rural area because it's more than my style is a street style.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because my style is more of a street style.

The original mixes articles and structure incorrectly: 'the views in a rural area' is awkward—use plural 'views in rural areas' for general preference. 'it's more than my style is a street style' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'my style is more of a street style'. Also use 'more of a' to express degree/type.

× So I like to be in the street.

✓ So I like being in the street.

Both 'like to be' and 'like being' can be correct, but 'like being in the street' sounds more natural for describing a preference or habit. Use consistent present tense form.

× I like to take photo of the street.

✓ I like to take photos of the street.

Use the plural noun 'photos' when speaking generally. Also include the article if singular: 'a photo'. The verb phrase 'take photos of' is the correct collocation.

× I prefer the views from my own country is Vietnam because Vietnam is going up on everything from the economic, from the environment and the viewer, the street atmosphere growing up too.

✓ I prefer views from my own country, Vietnam, because Vietnam is improving in many areas such as the economy, the environment, and the street atmosphere.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: awkward 'the views from my own country is Vietnam' should be 'views from my own country, Vietnam'. 'going up on everything' is incorrect—use 'improving in many areas' or 'developing'. 'from the economic, from the environment and the viewer, the street atmosphere growing up too' is ungrammatical and unclear; list the areas clearly: 'the economy, the environment, and the street atmosphere'. Use parallel structure and present continuous or present simple suitably.