Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler, correct grammar, and add one specific detail or example. Use linking words to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and remove hesitations.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because photography helps me relax. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes at sunrise since the light and mist create a peaceful atmosphere that I find calming.

提案: Respond directly and clearly: give a concise topic sentence, avoid hesitations and vague phrases, and explain why with a specific reason or example. Use a linking word to expand (for example, because...). Correct grammar (e.g., 'rural areas' and 'inherent culture').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they often preserve traditional ways of life. For example, I enjoy photographing small villages where you can see local festivals and traditional houses, which tell a lot about the community's culture.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific: open with a clear opinion, remove repetitions and filler, and give a concrete reason or short example why you prefer your country's views. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect sentences and improve coherence.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and local seasons. For instance, I often visit a nearby national park in winter when the waterfalls freeze, which lets me capture dramatic icy landscapes that I wouldn't know about abroad.

× I prefer to click pictures of different scenarios because it gives feeling of relaxation and especially I love to click pictures of mountains and natural view because if it makes me feel.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of different scenes because it gives me a feeling of relaxation, and especially I love taking pictures of mountains and natural views because they make me feel relaxed.

Use of 'to click pictures' is unnatural; prefer verb+ing 'taking pictures' (Grammar Problem Type 10). 'Different scenarios' is better as 'different scenes'. 'Gives feeling of relaxation' needs an object and article: 'gives me a feeling of relaxation'. 'Click pictures of mountains and natural view' should be 'taking pictures of mountains and natural views' and plural 'views'. 'Because if it makes me feel' is ungrammatical and should be 'because they make me feel relaxed' (subject-verb agreement and correct clause structure). Suggestions: use verb+ing for activities, include appropriate objects/articles, make nouns plural when general, and ensure complete clauses with correct subjects and verbs.

× Well, talking about uh, different view of area, uh, I definitely prefer rural area because we find real traditional values and in inherent cultural.

✓ Well, talking about different views of an area, I definitely prefer rural areas because we find real traditional values and inherent culture there.

'Different view of area' should be 'different views of an area' (preposition and number) (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'Rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match general preference. 'In inherent cultural' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'inherent culture' or 'inherent cultural values' and place 'there' to indicate location. Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('of'), match singular/plural as needed, and use correct noun phrases ('inherent culture' or 'inherent cultural values').

× Well, Speaking of that, I really appreciate my own country view rather than other countries because I know my own, uh, my country locality as well as the location.

✓ Well, speaking of that, I really appreciate the views of my own country rather than those of other countries because I know my country's localities and locations.

'My own country view' is awkward; use 'the views of my own country' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'Rather than other countries' should be 'rather than those of other countries' to compare 'views'. 'I know my own, uh, my country locality as well as the location' has pronoun repetition and incorrect noun forms; use 'I know my country's localities and locations' or 'I am familiar with the local areas and locations in my country.' Suggestions: make comparisons parallel (use 'those of...'), avoid repetitive pronouns, and use correct plural nouns for general reference.

× I'm quite familiar about my own country, umm, so that's why I do prefer my own country view rather than other countries.

✓ I'm quite familiar with my own country, so that's why I prefer the views of my own country to those of other countries.

Use 'familiar with' rather than 'familiar about' (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'I do prefer my own country view rather than other countries' is ungrammatical: use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons and make 'views' plural; also compare 'the views of my own country to those of other countries.' Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('with'), use 'prefer A to B' structure, and ensure nouns being compared are parallel and plural when general.