Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (verb tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitations, and make answers more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, use past simple for completed actions (“I enjoyed” → “I enjoy” for general habit or “I enjoyed” for a specific trip) and correct forms: “When I visit new places, I take a lot of pictures” or “Last week I visited the waterfront station and took many photos.” Also avoid filler sounds like “uh” to sound more fluent.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I visit a new place, I usually take lots of photos to remember it; for example, last week I visited the waterfront station and took many pictures of the skyline and riverside.

提案: Correct word choice and sentence structure, and add linking words to make the answer coherent. Say clearly whether you prefer urban or rural views, give a reason, and give a short example. Fix phrases like “urban era” → “urban area,” plural/singular agreement (“buildings”), and phrasing for habits (“I usually take pictures from rooftops”).

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the modern high-rise buildings and city lights. For instance, I often take photos from rooftops to capture the skyline at sunset, which looks spectacular.

提案: Improve grammar, vocabulary and clarity. Use correct singular/plural forms and precise words (e.g., “my own country,” “a diverse country,” “a park”). Give a concise reason and an example with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct collocations: “take pictures” not “take the take picture.”

例: I definitely prefer views in my own country because it is very diverse. For example, there are rivers, mountains and many beautiful parks, so I often travel around locally to photograph different landscapes.

× Yes, I really enjoyed taking pictures, especially when I visited a new place.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures, especially when I visit a new place.

The student used past tense 'enjoyed' and 'visited' which implies a completed action. The question asks about general preference, so present simple 'enjoy' and 'visit' are appropriate to express habitual actions. Suggestion: use present simple for general habits (I enjoy, I visit).

× When I visiting new places, that time I take a lot of picture.

✓ When I visit new places, I take a lot of pictures.

The structure 'When I visiting' is incorrect because after 'I' a base verb with appropriate tense is required. Use present simple 'visit' for habitual actions. Also 'that time' is unnecessary and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use 'When I visit new places, I take a lot of pictures.'

× For example, last uh, week I visited waterfront station, I have taken a lot of picture.

✓ For example, last week I visited Waterfront Station and I took a lot of pictures.

Mixing past simple 'visited' with present perfect 'have taken' is inconsistent when a specific past time ('last week') is given. Use past simple for both clauses: 'visited' and 'took'. Also capitalize proper noun 'Waterfront Station' and use plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use past simple when specifying a past time (last week I took ...).

× I prefer urban era views.

✓ I prefer urban area views.

The word 'era' (a period of time) is incorrect here; the intended word is 'area' (a place). Use the adjective-noun combination 'urban area views' or better 'urban views'. Suggestion: say 'I prefer urban views' or 'I prefer views in urban areas.'

× I especially there are modern high rise building and I most likely take a picture from rooftop.

✓ There are modern high-rise buildings, and I most often take pictures from rooftops.

The original combines clauses incorrectly. Start with 'There are' to state existence, pluralize 'building' to 'buildings', hyphenate 'high-rise', and prefer 'most often' instead of 'most likely' to indicate frequency. Also use plural 'pictures' and 'rooftops' or 'the rooftop'. Suggestion: separate ideas into two clauses: 'There are modern high-rise buildings, and I most often take pictures from rooftops.'

× It's really outstanding.

✓ They're really striking/It's really impressive.

'Outstanding' is not incorrect but sounds unnatural for views; choose 'striking' or 'impressive'. Also pronoun should match subject: if referring to 'views' use 'They're'; if referring to experience 'It's'. Suggestion: match pronoun to subject and pick a more natural adjective: 'They're really striking.'

× Definitely my own countries.

✓ Definitely my own country.

'Countries' plural conflicts with 'my own' when referring to a single nation. Use singular 'country'. Suggestion: 'Definitely my own country.'

× My country is diverse country.

✓ My country is a diverse country.

Omission of the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'diverse country' is incorrect. Add 'a'. Suggestion: 'My country is a diverse country.' Alternatively, 'My country is diverse.'

× There are a plenty of places such as a river, mountain and also fark.

✓ There are plenty of places such as rivers, mountains and also parks.

'A plenty of' is incorrect; use 'plenty of' without 'a'. Also list items should be plural if nonspecific: 'rivers, mountains'. 'Fark' is a misspelling of 'park'. Suggestion: 'There are plenty of places such as rivers, mountains and parks.'

× So I definitely prefer to take the take picture in my country.

✓ So I definitely prefer to take pictures in my country.

The phrase 'take the take picture' is a duplication and incorrect. Use plural 'pictures' to indicate general preference. Also keep verb infinitive 'to take' followed by plural noun. Suggestion: 'I prefer to take pictures in my country.'