Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 一句话直接回应后用一到两句具体说明并避免重复与停顿。注意流畅性与词汇多样性，可用更自然的短语如“capturing scenery”或“using my phone/camera”。减少填充词（uh/umm）。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it lets me capture moments and perspectives I find beautiful. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines with my phone, which helps me remember places and share them with friends.

提案: 开头用清晰的主题句直接回答问题，随后用具体原因和细节支持观点，避免重复词汇与语法错误。用连接词（because, however, for example）让表达更连贯，并使用更准确的形容词（e.g. noisy, crowded, peaceful）。

例: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and natural. For instance, mountains, rivers and farmland are relaxing compared with crowded city streets full of traffic and tall buildings.

提案: 回答要直接并提供清晰理由和具体例子，避免含糊和语法错误。说明为什么外国景色更吸引你（比如文化差异、建筑风格或自然景观），并用正确表达如“Europe”或“America”前加定冠词或改为“Europe and North America”。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often show different cultures and landscapes. For example, I enjoy European historic architecture and North American national parks, which are quite different from the scenery I see in my home country.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views since, uh, it's really limited only by view, by, by seeking the views through my eyes.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views since it's only limited by what I can see with my eyes.

原句中“it's really limited only by view, by, by seeking the views through my eyes” 表达冗长且不符合英语习惯。改为“it's only limited by what I can see with my eyes” 使用名词性从句（what I can see）更自然地表达“我能看到的范围”。同时将动名词短语简化以提高流畅度。建议：用简洁的名词或从句来替代重复的动名词短语。

× So I think taking pictures by those, uh, electronic devices such as camera or mobile phone is, umm, is really, is really nice.

✓ So I think taking pictures with electronic devices such as a camera or a mobile phone is really nice.

原句中“by those electronic devices” 和“such as camera or mobile phone” 在介词和冠词使用上不准确。通常用“with”表工具，且“camera”与“mobile phone” 前需不定冠词“a”表示任一设备。建议：用“with”表示用某工具，并在可数单数名词前加适当冠词。

× Umm I prefer the views in the rural area since I live in the live in the modern city.

✓ I prefer rural views since I live in a modern city.

原句中重复“live in the live in” 并且“the rural area”与后文“a modern city” 对应不当。习惯表达为“prefer rural views” 或“prefer the countryside”，并用“a modern city” 表示某一现代城市。建议：避免重复，使用正确的介词短语并简化名词短语。

× Umm loads of high tall buildings and and cars really uh noise and are really boring to me.

✓ There are lots of tall buildings and cars, which are noisy and boring to me.

原句结构混乱："loads of high tall buildings and and cars really uh noise" 中“noise”被误用为动词，且重复单词并缺少连贯的从句。改为“There are lots of tall buildings and cars, which are noisy and boring to me” 明确主句与定语从句关系，使用形容词“noisy”描述声音。建议：使用形容词而非名词当作谓语补语，清晰连接句子成分。

× So the the views like mountains and rivers and also cows are really attractive to me.

✓ Views such as mountains, rivers and cows are really attractive to me.

原句有重复“the the”并且直接用“the views like...” 不够自然。改为“Views such as...” 更符合列举习惯。名词复数形式使用正确，但句子需要更自然的表达。建议：删除重复词并用“such as”列举。

× Of course I prefer the views in other countries things everyone prefers those views that we have that that they have never seen before, like umm, since I live in the umm, the Asia countries, so I actually really produce those views from the European and America.

✓ Of course I prefer views in other countries; everyone prefers sights they have never seen before. Since I live in an Asian country, I especially want to see views from Europe and America.

原句有多处代词和指代问题："the views in other countries things everyone prefers those views that we have that that they have never seen before" 指代混乱且冗长，"the Asia countries" 和 "produce those views from the European and America" 用词错误。改为三句，分别表达偏好、一般性陈述和个人情况。使用“an Asian country” 表示单个国家，用“see”替代“produce”。建议：把复杂句拆成短句，确保代词有明确的先行词并使用正确地名词搭配（Europe, America 或 European and American views）。