Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and grammar errors, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say why you enjoy it, mention specific subjects you photograph, and give a short reason or result.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph natural scenes like landscapes and sunsets when I go hiking, which lets me capture the mood of the place. As a result, I can look back at the photos and relive those experiences.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, remove repetitions, correct grammar, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Mention a concrete example or routine to make it vivid. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer wide open fields and better opportunities to see sunsets closely. For instance, I live in a small hometown, so I often get up early to walk to a nearby hill and photograph the sunrise over the fields.

提案: State a clear preference or say you like both, then use linking words (for example, however, whereas) to contrast types of views you seek at home and abroad. Correct repetitions and use singular/plural correctly. Provide one specific example of a place or scene.

例: I enjoy photographing views both at home and abroad. At home, for example, I explore mountains, deserts and plains to capture varied landscapes; whereas when I travel overseas I usually seek coastal scenes like beaches and cliffs to photograph.

× When I love to take pictures of different views because they helped me remember special moments addition to it, I specially found off a photographing's natural scenes.

✓ I love to take pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments; in addition, I especially enjoy photographing natural scenes.

Errors: incorrect tense ('helped' should be present 'help' to match 'I love'), incorrect phrase 'addition to it' (use 'in addition'), wrong adverb form 'specially' (use 'especially'), awkward phrase 'found off a photographing's' (use 'enjoy photographing'). Suggestion: keep verbs in present to match habitual action, use standard linking phrase 'in addition', use 'especially' for emphasis, and use gerund 'photographing' after verbs like 'enjoy'. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Such as I often take pictures of landscapes and sunsets when I go for hiking.

✓ For example, I often take pictures of landscapes and sunsets when I go hiking.

Errors: 'Such as' misused to begin a sentence (use 'For example' or integrate into previous sentence); 'go for hiking' is incorrect preposition and article usage — correct is 'go hiking'. Suggestion: use 'go hiking' or 'go for a hike' and start examples with 'For example' or integrate with previous clause. Grammar problem type ID:11

× To be honest, I much prefer to take the views of rural areas because there is there are there is an opportunity to to see the sunset when closely and watch open fields addition to it.

✓ To be honest, I much prefer views of rural areas because there is an opportunity to see the sunset up close and to watch open fields; in addition, ...

Errors: repeated 'there is there are there is' is redundant and confusing; 'take the views' wrong collocation — use 'prefer views' or 'prefer the views of'; 'to to' duplicate; 'when closely' incorrect adverb placement — use 'up close' or 'closely' after verb; 'addition to it' should be 'in addition'. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use correct collocations, fix adverb placement, and use 'in addition' for linking. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Since I live in Chal who in the hometown, I usually get up early to to see.

✓ Since I live in Chal, my hometown, I usually get up early to see the sunrise.

Errors: 'Chal who in the hometown' is ungrammatical — apposition needed ('Chal, my hometown'); duplicate 'to to'; sentence lacks clear object of 'see' — specify 'the sunrise'. Suggestion: use apposition for hometown clarification, remove duplicate words, and complete the verb with its object. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Well, I love love to take a view of both my country and overseas views.

✓ Well, I love to take views of both my country and overseas places.

Errors: duplicated 'love love' is repetition; 'take a view of' is awkward — 'take views of' or 'photograph views in' is better; 'overseas views' is redundant, use 'overseas places' or 'places abroad'. Suggestion: remove repetition and use natural collocation like 'take views of' or 'photograph views in'. Grammar problem type ID:2

× Whenever I am in my own country, I love to visit different landscapes such as mountain, desert and plains areas.

✓ Whenever I am in my own country, I love to visit different landscapes such as mountains, deserts and plains.

Errors: singular nouns 'mountain' and 'desert' should be plural to match 'different landscapes' and the list format; 'plains areas' is redundant — use 'plains' or 'plain areas'. Suggestion: use plural forms when listing types of landscapes and avoid redundant words. Grammar problem type ID:1

× By contrast, when I when I'm in abroad, I always visit coastal scenes.

✓ By contrast, when I'm abroad, I always visit coastal areas.

Errors: duplicate 'when I when I'm'; incorrect preposition 'in abroad' — correct is 'abroad' without 'in'; 'coastal scenes' is acceptable but 'coastal areas' is more natural. Suggestion: remove duplication, drop 'in' before 'abroad', and prefer 'coastal areas' or 'coastal scenery'. Grammar problem type ID:11