Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas. Also correct tense and article usage (e.g., “my photos,” not “my photo photos”).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they lift my mood when I feel bored. For example, scrolling through my photos often inspires me and brings back the atmosphere of the moment, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific reason and an example. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct sentence structure. Avoid trailing off at the end.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For example, urban areas provide interesting architecture and lively scenes, whereas rural areas offer peaceful landscapes; depending on my mood, I choose the type of view that fits how I want to feel.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and a specific reason with a brief example. Correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles) and avoid vague words like “peace” when you mean “places” or “views.” Use linking words such as because and for example.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer more variety and new experiences. For example, traveling abroad lets me discover different landscapes and cultural scenes that I haven’t seen at home, which keeps photography exciting.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I when I get bored I started to scroll through my photo photos and be encouraged by this photo and it also gives some atmosphere and very good vibes.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I get bored I start to scroll through my photos and feel encouraged by them; they also create an atmosphere and give very good vibes.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses (started vs get) incorrectly. Use the present simple 'start' to match the habitual action 'when I get bored'. 'Photo photos' is redundant and should be 'photos'. 'Be encouraged by this photo' is unidiomatic: use 'feel encouraged by them'. Also combine ideas with appropriate punctuation to improve clarity.

× I think I prefer both and I don't see a big difference between views in urban areas or rural areas.

✓ I think I prefer both, and I don't see a big difference between views in urban and rural areas.

The phrase 'between views in urban areas or rural areas' uses the wrong conjunction: use 'between... and ...' not 'between... or ...'. Also combine 'urban areas or rural areas' to 'urban and rural areas' for concision and correct parallelism.

× For me, I think the most significant it is how I see this view, how I feel myself when I took this picture and.

✓ For me, what matters most is how I see a view and how I feel when I take the picture.

The original has redundant and awkward phrasing ('the most significant it is') and mixes past 'took' with a general statement—use present simple 'take' for habitual or general actions. Remove 'myself' after 'feel' as 'feel' does not require a reflexive pronoun here, and complete the sentence properly.

× I think I would prefer peace in other countries because for me views in my own country is like a little bit boring because I know every view and I want to have some diversity.

✓ I think I would prefer places in other countries because, for me, views in my own country are a little bit boring since I know every view and I want some variety.

Subject-verb agreement: 'views ... is' should be 'views ... are'. 'Prefer peace' seems incorrect in context; likely 'prefer places' or 'prefer views' is intended. 'Because' used twice made the sentence repetitive—use 'since' and restructure for clarity. 'Have some diversity' is better phrased as 'want some variety'.

× Though This is why I would prefer views in other country.

✓ This is why I would prefer views in other countries.

Capitalization: 'This' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. 'Other country' must be pluralized to 'other countries' to match general meaning and count. The word 'Though' is unnecessary and creates a fragment; remove it to make a clear concluding sentence.