Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法ミスと不自然な語順、冗長さが目立ちます。主語と動詞の一致（I like taking pictures）、単語の形（foreign view→views abroad / of foreign places）、時制と冠詞の使い方を直してください。また、回答は短く明確にし、支持する詳細を一つか二つに絞り、接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って論理的に繋げましょう。具体的には：1) 主題文をはっきり述べる。2) 旅行中に何を撮るか簡潔に説明する。3) どこで共有するか述べる。

例: I enjoy taking photos of different places, especially when I travel abroad. For example, I usually photograph cityscapes and local landmarks. I then share my best shots with friends and on social media.

提案: 回答が繰り返しや不自然な表現（prefer view in urban earlier, light up by illumination, can make it can make）を含んでいます。まずは簡潔な主旨（I prefer urban views）を述べ、その理由を一つか二つに絞りましょう。原因を述べるときは接続詞（because, so, as）を使い、形容詞や名詞の形を正しく使ってください（illuminated, scenery）。例を付けると説得力が増します。

例: I prefer urban views because cities have interesting architecture and colorful lights at night. For instance, skyscrapers and illuminated streets create a lively atmosphere that's great for photography.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、語法と単語選び（I plead for→I prefer, illuminated very colorful→very colorfully/beautifully illuminated）、冗長な言い直し、フィラー（uh）が多い点を改善してください。主語文を明確にし、なぜ自国の景色が好きか（馴染み、文化的価値、アクセスのしやすさ等）を一つ具体例で補足すると良いです。発話の流暢さを上げるために短い練習文を覚えておきましょう。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the culture and landmarks. For example, I live in Tokyo and I often enjoy the colorful illumination of Tokyo Tower at night, which looks stunning against the skyline.

× Yeah, I like taking the picture of the foreign view so I often go to travel for upload.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures of foreign views, so I often travel to upload them.

The verb 'like' is followed by a gerund 'taking', which is correct, but 'picture' should be plural when speaking generally ('taking pictures'). 'Foreign view' is better as 'foreign views'. 'Go to travel' is incorrect; use 'travel' as the verb. 'Upload' needs an object ('them'). Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× So I usually take photos during my trip.

✓ I usually take photos during my trips.

The original sentence is understandable but inconsistent with general habit; use plural 'trips' to match habitual action. No conjunction needed at start. This fixes sentence structure and quantifier usage.

× So and I sharing my best photo with my friend and social media.

✓ I share my best photos with my friends and on social media.

Using 'and' at the start is unnecessary. 'I sharing' is incorrect; use simple present 'I share' for habitual action. 'Photo' should be plural to match general practice. Use 'friends' plural and preposition 'on' with 'social media'.

× That's good question.

✓ That's a good question.

Missing article 'a' before 'good question'. English requires an article in this noun phrase.

× I prefer view in urban earlier so they have a lot of buildings and it's light up by illumination so it's so beautiful scenery can make it can make beautiful scenery at night.

✓ I prefer urban views because they have many buildings, and they are lit up by lights, so the scenery can be very beautiful at night.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural 'views'. 'In urban earlier' is incorrect—use 'urban' as adjective 'urban views' and 'earlier' is wrong in context; use 'because'. 'They' correctly refers to views or areas; avoid 'it's light up by illumination' and use passive 'they are lit up by lights'. Remove repetition 'can make it can make'. Use 'very beautiful' to correct adjective usage and place 'at night' at end.

× Yeah, I plead for a view in my own country.

✓ Yeah, I prefer views in my own country.

'Plead for' is wrong in this context; use 'prefer' to express preference. Match plural 'views' for general preference.

× So I live in Tokyo, uh, Tokyo Tower is illuminated very colorful so and I like watch at Tokyo Tower, uh, at night.

✓ I live in Tokyo. Tokyo Tower is illuminated in very colorful lights, and I like to watch Tokyo Tower at night.

Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'illuminated in very colorful lights' or 'is very colorfully illuminated'. 'I like watch' needs infinitive 'to watch'. Remove unnecessary fillers and correct article/preposition usage.

× So it is so beautiful and, uh, colorfully.

✓ It is so beautiful and colorful.

Use adjective 'colorful' rather than adverb 'colorfully' when describing 'it'. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. Use parallel adjective structure 'beautiful and colorful'.