Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は内容が分かるが、発音や文法、論理のつながりを改善する必要があります。まず冒頭で直接的なトピック文（Yes, I do. / No, I don’t.）を使い、その後に短い理由や具体例を続けてください。文は5文以内に抑え、接続詞（because, so, and then, for example）を使って論理的につなげます。語彙は“foreign views”より“scenery abroad”や“landscapes”のように自然な表現に変え、動詞の形（I share）や前置詞（on social media）に注意してください。発音では“upload”の使い方が不自然なので“post”を使うと良いです。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenery abroad because I like seeing different cultures and landscapes. For example, I usually take many photos while traveling and choose the best ones to post on social media. I also share my favorite pictures with friends to get their opinions.

提案: 答えは意図が伝わるが、文法と明瞭さに多くの改善点があります。まず“prefer”の後は名詞（urban views）か動名詞（urban areas）を使い、比較や理由を述べるときはbecauseやsoで明確に繋げます。冗長な繰り返し（"make it can make"など）を避け、一文を短くして論理を整理してください。語彙は“illumination”は使えるが、“lit up”や“night view”の方が自然です。

例: I prefer urban views because there are many buildings and streets illuminated at night. The city lights create a vibrant atmosphere, and I find the night skyline especially beautiful. For instance, I enjoy walking along busy streets to photograph the lit-up architecture.

提案: 意味は通じるが、語彙や文法の誤りが目立ちます。“plead for”は誤用で、正しくは“I prefer”です。具体例（Tokyo Tower）は良いが、形容詞の位置や副詞の使い方（"very colorful"ではなく"very colorful"はOKだが文全体を滑らかに）を改善してください。不要なつなぎ言葉（uh）を減らし、理由や感情を簡潔に述べると効果的です。

例: I prefer views in my own country. I live in Tokyo, and one of my favorite sights is Tokyo Tower at night because it is brightly lit and very colorful. I often go there to admire and photograph the tower when the lights are on.

× Yeah, I like taking the picture of the foreign view so I often go to travel for upload.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures of foreign views, so I often travel to upload them.

The sentence had count and gerund issues: 'taking the picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). 'the foreign view' is better as 'foreign views' for general preference. 'go to travel' is incorrect phrasing; use the verb 'travel'. 'for upload' is unclear; use 'to upload them' to show purpose and refer back to pictures. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habits and use infinitive 'to travel' or simply 'travel' to describe the action. Note: this explanation is in English as requested.

× So I usually take photos during my trip.

✓ So I usually take photos during my trips.

The sentence refers to a regular/habitual action so 'trip' should be plural 'trips' (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). Using plural clarifies repeated occurrences. The verb 'take' is correct present simple for habitual action.

× So and I sharing my best photo with my friend and social media.

✓ So I share my best photos with my friends and on social media.

The original uses 'I sharing' which lacks auxiliary and correct tense (should be 'I share' in present simple) and mixes singular/plural pronouns incorrectly (Grammar Problem Type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns and Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). Use 'photos' plural, 'friends' plural if more than one, and 'on social media' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use present simple 'I share' for habitual actions and correct preposition 'on'. Note: explanation in English as requested.

× That's good question.

✓ That's a good question.

This is an article omission error (Grammar Problem Type 22: Article errors and Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). English requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'good question'. Suggestion: include 'a' in such expressions: 'That's a good question.'

× I prefer view in urban earlier so they have a lot of buildings and it's light up by illumination so it's so beautiful scenery can make it can make beautiful scenery at night.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they have a lot of buildings and are lit up by lights, so the scenery can be very beautiful at night.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural 'views' (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). 'in urban earlier' is ungrammatical; use 'in urban areas' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). 'it's light up by illumination' is incorrect passive and tense; correct is 'are lit up by lights' (Grammar Problem Type 21: Incorrect passive voice and Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). Repetition 'can make it can make' removed. 'very beautiful at night' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify and use correct plural forms and passive construction 'are lit' for illumination.

× I prefer view in urban earlier so they have a lot of buildings and it's light up by illumination so it's so beautiful scenery can make it can make beautiful scenery at night.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they have a lot of buildings and are lit up by lights, so the scenery can be very beautiful at night.

Pronoun reference 'they' must match plural noun 'views' or 'areas' (Grammar Problem Type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number. Also changed 'it's' to 'are' to agree with plural 'areas'.

× Yeah, I plead for a view in my own country.

✓ Yeah, I prefer views in my own country.

'Plead for' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'prefer' (Grammar Problem Type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice). Also 'a view' vs 'views': for general preference use plural 'views' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Suggestion: use 'prefer' for stating preferences and pluralize for general statements.

× So I live in Tokyo, uh, Tokyo Tower is illuminated very colorful so and I like watch at Tokyo Tower, uh, at night.

✓ I live in Tokyo. Tokyo Tower is very colorfully illuminated, and I like to watch it at night.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and wrong adverb/adjective form 'very colorful' used with 'illuminated' needs adverb 'colorfully' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors and Grammar Problem Type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'I like watch at Tokyo Tower' is missing 'to' and wrong preposition; correct is 'I like to watch it at night' (Grammar Problem Type 4: Modal verb usage not applicable; main issue is infinitive usage and preposition). Suggestion: split into two sentences, use 'colorfully illuminated' and 'like to watch it at night.'

× So it is so beautiful and, uh, colorfully.

✓ It is so beautiful and colorful.

'Colorfully' (adverb) is incorrectly used after linking verb 'is'; an adjective 'colorful' should be used (Grammar Problem Type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Also remove unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: use adjective after 'is' to describe a noun: 'It is colorful.'