Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子不够自然且有语法错误与冗余。回答应直接回应问题，给出一到两句支持细节并用连接词提高连贯性。注意动词形式（take → taking/ take photos）、冠词和词序，避免重复表达“travelling is my life moments”。可以简化为：我喜欢在旅行时拍照，因为这些照片记录重要回忆，并帮助我记住风景细节。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views when I travel because they help me capture memorable moments. For example, I often photograph city skylines and mountain landscapes so I can remember the trip later.

提案: 表达不自然且有重复（"modern modern"）与语法错误（"prefer to urban in views"）。需要先给主题句（I prefer…），然后用一两句具体原因或例子支持，使用连接词如 because 或 so。注意完成句子，避免片段。

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and lively streets. For instance, I like photographing skyscrapers and busy squares, which often have interesting lighting and activity.

提案: 回答含糊且句子结构混乱，重复且语法错误多（"using my in other countries"、"the more view, the more"）。应直接回答并提供具体理由或例子，使用连接词如 because 或 so that，并避免重复。可以说明想看不同文化和风景的原因。

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different cultures and landscapes. For example, traveling abroad lets me photograph unique architecture and natural scenery I can't find at home.

× Yes, I like take a photo of different views when my traveling because the travelling is my life moments take taking picture is.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of different views when I travel because traveling gives me life’s memorable moments.

句子结构混乱，缺少正确的动词形式和主语位置。应使用动名词 taking 搭配 like；photo 应为复数 photos；when 后应接主语和动词 I travel（不是 my traveling）；because 后半句意思表达不清，改为简洁的完整句子 traveling gives me life’s memorable moments（旅行带给我难忘的时刻）。建议练习主句+时间/原因从句的标准语序，并注意动词形式与名词单复数。

× I like take a photo of different views when my traveling because the travelling is my life moments take taking picture is.

✓ I like taking photos of different views when I travel because traveling gives me life’s memorable moments.

名词复数错误：photo 应为复数 photos，因为通常表示多次拍摄或多处景色。moments 需要与前面语义协调，使用 memorable moments 更自然。建议注意可数名词单复数用法，判断是否表示泛指或多次发生。

× I like take a photo of different views when my traveling because the travelling is my life moments take taking picture is.

✓ I like taking photos of different views when I travel because traveling gives me life’s memorable moments.

动词后接动名词：like 后应接動名詞 taking 而不是不定式 take。traveling 作动名词或现在分词表示一般活动，但作时间状语时应用 I travel 或 while traveling。建议记住常见动词搭配（like + -ing, enjoy + -ing 等）。

× I prefer to urban in views because I like the modern modern buildings. That's made me interesting and.

✓ I prefer urban views because I like modern buildings. They interest me.

介词使用错误：原句中 to urban in views 位置错误，应直接用形容词+名词 urban views。此外 that’s made me interesting 用法错误，应改为 They interest me（它们让我感兴趣）。建议注意形容词修饰名词的常见顺序与不需要多余介词。

× I prefer to urban in views because I like the modern modern buildings. That's made me interesting and.

✓ I prefer urban views because I like modern buildings. They interest me.

形容词顺序和重复：modern modern 重复，应只保留一个 modern；形容词需放在名词前（modern buildings）。建议避免重复形容词，遵循形容词置于被修饰名词之前的规则。

× I prefer using my in other countries because they are the world is very large. I want to I prefer to watch the more view, the more.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because the world is very large. I want to see more views.

代词和结构混乱：using my in other countries 没有明确代词或名词，应改为 visiting other countries。they are the world is very large 是重复且代词指代不清，应直接说 the world is very large。最后一句不完整，改为 I want to see more views。建议理清主语代词指代对象，使用明确动词短语（visit/see）。

× I prefer to urban in views because I like the modern modern buildings. That's made me interesting and.

✓ I prefer urban views because I like modern buildings. They interest me.

时态与语态不当：That's made me interesting 使用了现在完成或被动结构不当，表意应为一般现在时 They interest me，表示经常性的喜好。建议在表达习惯性、一般事实时使用一般现在时。

× Umm, I prefer using my in other countries because they are the world is very large. I want to I prefer to watch the more view, the more.

✓ Umm, I prefer visiting other countries because the world is very large. I want to see more views.

句子结构混乱，包含无意义片段（using my, I want to I prefer to watch the more view, the more）。需要简化为完整的主语+谓语+宾语结构。建议先在脑中组织完整句子，再使用简短句子表达复合观点。