Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời chưa rõ nghĩa và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng dùng sai. Học sinh nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 chi tiết rõ ràng. Sửa lỗi từ vựng (use 'enjoy taking photos' not 'purchased'), ngữ pháp (complete sentence), và tránh những từ vô nghĩa. Nên dùng linking word nếu thêm thông tin.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like capturing landscapes because they make me feel calm and help me remember places I have visited.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng nhưng dùng từ sai và câu rời rạc; nhiều từ không phù hợp ('faithful', 'infested', 'growing fire and hair'). Học sinh cần phát triển một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể với từ vựng chính xác (e.g. peaceful, natural, greenery). Dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so' để nối ý.

例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of natural scenery. For example, I like seeing green fields and trees, which help me relax after a busy week.

提案: Câu trả lời không hoàn chỉnh và khó hiểu. Học sinh nên trả lời trực tiếp (own country or other countries), rồi giải thích lý do với một ví dụ. Tránh ấp úng; nếu cần thời gian, dùng cấu trúc 'That's an interesting question' rồi trả lời. Sử dụng từ vựng rõ ràng như 'local scenery' hoặc 'abroad' và cấu trúc so sánh nếu muốn.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to local landscapes and culture. For example, I enjoy visiting nearby mountains and historic towns that remind me of my childhood.

× Yes, I purchased taking pictures of division because a happy.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it makes me happy.

The student used incorrect verbs and adjectives: 'purchased taking pictures of division' is ungrammatical. Replace 'purchased' with 'enjoy' (verb meaning like), 'taking pictures of division' with 'taking pictures of different views'. 'because a happy' lacks verb and correct adjective use; change to 'because it makes me happy'. Suggestion: use verbs that match meaning and complete clauses with subjects and verbs.

× I prefer rural view because they are faithful and they are infested which help me relax.

✓ I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and uncrowded, which helps me relax.

Errors: 'rural view' should be plural 'rural views' to match 'prefer' and general meaning (singular/plural and noun form). 'faithful' and 'infested' are incorrect adjective choices; use 'peaceful' and 'uncrowded' to convey calm, relaxing environments. Relative clause: 'which help me relax' needs singular verb 'helps' because it refers to 'rural views' as a general idea (or treat 'which' as singular concept); better to use 'helps'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives and ensure verb agrees with the noun or idea referenced.

× For example, enjoy working in the countryside and looking at growing fire and hair.

✓ For example, I enjoy working in the countryside and looking at growing fields and trees.

The sentence lacks a subject ('I') and contains wrong words 'growing fire and hair' likely intended as 'growing fields and trees'. Add subject 'I' and correct noun choices. Suggestion: include subjects for clauses and check word choice for intended meaning.

× Unlike will our country and in the old country because, uh.

✓ I prefer views in my own country rather than in other countries because...

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'Unlike will our country and in the old country' is meaningless. Rephrase to 'I prefer views in my own country rather than in other countries' to answer the question. Keep 'because...' to add reason. Suggestion: use clear comparative structure 'rather than' or 'instead of' and complete the sentence with a reason.