Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejorar la claridad y la coherencia; organiza la respuesta en una oración principal y una o dos frases de apoyo. Evita contradicciones y añade una razón concreta y un ejemplo breve. Por ejemplo, explica por qué no te gusta y por qué pides a tu novia que tome las fotos.

例: I don't usually take pictures of views because I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than focus on my camera. However, I often ask my girlfriend to take photos for me so I have memories to look back on later, especially when we visit special places like a beach at sunset.

提案: Añadir más detalles específicos y una conexión lógica entre ideas. Usa una oración principal clara y luego dos apoyos: una razón concreta y un ejemplo personal para hacer la respuesta más natural y completa.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and cultural activities. For example, living in Montevideo I like walking along the waterfront and seeing street performers, which makes city views more interesting to me than quiet countryside scenes.

提案: Dar más especificidad y variedad léxica; menciona tipos de lugares que te interesan y una breve razón más concreta. Conecta las ideas con palabras de enlace para mayor coherencia.

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me experience different cultures and historic landmarks. For instance, when I visit a new country I always try to see famous sites like cathedrals or markets, since they reveal a lot about local history and daily life.

× I don't like taking pictures at all, in fact I always ask my girlfriend to take them and because I would like to have one for the future.

✓ I don't like taking pictures at all; in fact I always ask my girlfriend to take them because I would like to have some for the future.

The sentence contains redundancy and awkward coordination rather than a tense error: 'and because' incorrectly connects clauses. Also 'one' is vague—'some' or 'a few' fits better with 'pictures'. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses and use 'because' without 'and'. Suggestion: separate ideas and choose the correct quantifier ('some' or 'a few') to match plural 'pictures'.

× I prefer using urban areas over rural ones because I live in Montevideo and I enjoy the atmosphere and energy of the city.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural ones because I live in Montevideo and enjoy the city's atmosphere and energy.

'Prefer' is typically followed by 'to' when comparing two things ('prefer A to B') not 'using' or 'over'. Also 'using urban areas' is unnatural; simply 'prefer urban areas'. Condense 'the atmosphere and energy of the city' to 'the city's atmosphere and energy' for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and avoid unnecessary verbs like 'using'.

× I prefer views in other countries because I love traveling and discovering new places, so when I go abroad I always plan to visit new places and important tourist buildings.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love traveling and discovering new places, so when I go abroad I always plan to visit important tourist sites and landmarks.

Repetition: 'new places' is repeated; 'important tourist buildings' is awkward—use 'tourist sites' or 'landmarks'. Tenses are acceptable (present simple for habits). Improve cohesion by avoiding repetition and choosing natural collocations. Suggestion: replace repeated phrases and use 'sites' or 'landmarks' for clarity.