Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, avoid repetition and filler words, use correct grammar and varied vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct singular/plural and verb forms, and replace fillers (uh, um) with brief pauses.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it relaxes me and helps me focus. For example, I like capturing colorful landscapes at sunset, as the warm light creates impressive contrasts and calm moods.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with clear reasons and examples. Avoid vague words like "smooth" and minimize fillers. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to make the response coherent and stay within 3–4 sentences.

例: It depends on the situation; I enjoy both urban and rural views. For example, in cities I photograph striking architecture and street life because of interesting shapes and colors, while in the countryside I capture peaceful landscapes and natural light.

提案: Answer directly and use clear, accurate vocabulary to explain reasons. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., "explode" is wrong here). Provide two specific reasons with a linking word and at least one concrete example to support your preference.

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many beautiful places I haven’t explored yet and it’s more affordable to travel locally. For instance, I can visit nearby mountains and historic towns without spending much, which lets me take more photographs.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because it relax my mind and I love uh, I love to take a bit uh, I love to take a photography of a different views and it uh, and it, uh, relax my mind and I love it because it is a colorful, colorful and. Impressive.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it relaxes my mind. I love taking photographs of different views because they relax me and are colorful and impressive.

Errors: incorrect use of gerund/noun forms and number. 'taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' (plural noun after 'taking' activity). 'it relax my mind' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun issues; the action of taking pictures relaxes (third person singular) my mind, so use 'relaxes'. 'take a photography' is incorrect — use 'take photographs' or 'take a photograph' and match number with 'different views' so plural. Also 'a different views' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or make singular. Suggestions: use 'taking pictures' or 'taking photographs', ensure subject-verb agreement for present simple with third-person singular (relaxes), and keep number consistent (plural views -> photographs). Keep sentences concise and avoid filler sounds.

× I prefer smooth. It's depend on the situation, uh, because both are equally important for me.

✓ I don't have a fixed preference. It depends on the situation because both are equally important to me.

Errors: 'It's depend' is incorrect because 'depend' needs third-person singular agreement as 'depends'. Also 'I prefer smooth' is unclear and likely ungrammatical; corrected to a clear statement 'I don't have a fixed preference.' Suggestions: use 'depends' for third-person singular present, and provide a clear subject for 'prefer' (prefer what?). Use 'important to me' rather than 'for me' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, urban area is like, uh, whenever I went in the city, I like to take the pictures of uh, buildings and uh, uh, and uh, so umm, many more if, whenever.

✓ In urban areas, whenever I go to the city, I like to take pictures of buildings and many other things.

Errors: tense and participle issues and word choice. 'whenever I went' mixes past with present habitual context; use present simple 'whenever I go' for habitual actions. 'take the pictures of' should be 'take pictures of' (no definite article). 'many more if, whenever' is fragmented; replace with 'many other things.' Suggestions: use consistent present simple for habitual actions, drop unnecessary articles, and avoid filler words.

× I prefer view in my own country because in my country there's different kind of places which I did, uh, which I did not, did not, uh, yet, uh, explode.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there are different kinds of places that I have not visited yet.

Errors: 'I prefer view' should be 'views' (singular/plural). 'there's different kind of places' misuses 'there is' with plural noun; use 'there are' and 'kinds' plural. 'which I did not yet explode' is incorrect verb choice and tense; 'explode' is wrong word for 'visit' and 'did not...yet' should be present perfect 'have not visited yet.' Suggestions: use 'there are' for plural existence, pluralize 'kind(s)/views' appropriately, and use present perfect for experiences not yet done.

× Uh, there's so many different, there are so many different places, which is very beautiful and uh, umm, my country is a cheaper as compared to others country and, uh, I can, uh.

✓ There are so many different places that are very beautiful, and my country is cheaper compared to other countries.

Errors: subject-verb agreement with 'there's' before plural 'many' — use 'there are.' 'which is very beautiful' should agree in number with 'places' -> 'that are very beautiful.' 'a cheaper' incorrectly uses an article with comparative; use 'cheaper' without 'a.' 'others country' should be 'other countries.' Suggestions: use 'there are' for plural existence, ensure relative clause agrees in number, and form comparatives correctly (cheaper than or cheaper compared to other countries).