Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря, постарайтесь сформулировать одну чёткую тему (topic sentence), затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными деталями или примером. Избегайте тавтологии (повторов) и грамматических ошибок: используйте правильные времена и артикли, согласование подлежащего и глагола, корректную форму герундия/инфинитива. Свяжите идеи с помощью простых связок (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me feel calm and capture memories. For example, I often photograph natural scenes like mountains and rivers because their colors and textures relax me and look beautiful in photos.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ в первом предложении, затем поясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Уберите лишние слова и повторы, следите за предлогами и согласованием (prefer urban areas, not prefer on urban areas). Используйте связки (because, for instance) чтобы логично связать мысль.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a wide variety of interesting sights. For instance, I enjoy visiting museums, historic buildings and well-kept parks that are easy to reach and photograph.

提案: Начните с чёткого ответа (I prefer… / I would rather…). Затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример, избегая грамматических ошибок (use 'I have already seen' not 'I already seen'; 'interested in' requires noun/gerund). Не повторяйте фразу 'I would like' многократно; завершите мысль правильно.

例: I would rather see views in other countries because I have already visited many places at home. For example, I want to visit Paris and Istanbul to photograph famous landmarks and experience different cultures.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it gives me another vibe and also it gives me a very I feel more peaceful when I taking a picture of different views and also it's memorable for me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they give me a different vibe, and I feel more peaceful when I take pictures of different views; they are also memorable for me.

The sentence contains incorrect use of the -ing form and inconsistent subject-verb agreement. 'Taking' as a gerund is fine in 'I like taking pictures', but later 'when I taking a picture' is wrong; the correct form is 'when I take a picture' (use base verb after subject). Also 'it gives me another vibe' should agree in number with 'pictures' so 'they give me a different vibe'. Rewording improves coherence: use 'different' instead of 'another' and combine clauses to avoid repetition. Suggestions: use base verb after finite subjects (I take), ensure subject-verb agreement (pictures -> they give), and simplify repeated ideas.

× For example, I taking picture of nature.

✓ For example, I take pictures of nature.

This sentence shows a singular/plural and verb form issue. 'I taking picture' is ungrammatical: use the simple present 'I take' for habitual actions and plural 'pictures' to match general practice. Suggestion: use 'I take pictures of nature' to express a habitual activity.

× Well it both places very beautiful but I most likely to prefer on urban areas because it's more popular and I will see you more beautiful places like museums and also and also parks.

✓ Well, both places are very beautiful, but I am most likely to prefer urban areas because they are more popular and I can see more beautiful places there, such as museums and parks.

Multiple present-tense and auxiliary errors: missing verb 'are' for 'both places are very beautiful'; 'I most likely to prefer' is incorrect—use 'I am most likely to prefer' or 'I prefer'. 'Prefer on urban areas' should be 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer the urban areas' (preposition error). 'It's more popular' should agree with plural subject 'they are more popular'. 'I will see you more beautiful places' is incorrect: 'I can see more beautiful places there' is appropriate. Suggestions: include 'be' verbs for present descriptions, match verb forms to subjects, and avoid unnecessary pronouns like 'you'.

× In my country view is very beautiful and I already seen it.

✓ The views in my country are very beautiful and I have already seen them.

Pronoun and article issues: 'In my country view' needs plural 'views' and article 'the' or 'the views'. 'I already seen it' is ungrammatical—use present perfect 'I have already seen them' to indicate experience. Also replace singular 'it' with plural 'them' to refer to 'views'. Suggestion: use correct articles, plural nouns when appropriate, and proper auxiliary 'have' with past participle.

× But I would like to prefer views in other countries because I interested in their views.

✓ But I would prefer the views in other countries because I am interested in them.

'Would like to prefer' is awkward and incorrect; use either 'would like to see' or 'would prefer'. 'I interested in' misses the auxiliary verb 'am' for the adjective 'interested'. Also 'their views' can be replaced with 'them' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: choose the correct expression ('would prefer' or 'would like to') and include the appropriate auxiliary 'be' for adjectives.

× I would like to visit some countries like Paris, Istanbul and I would like to.

✓ I would like to visit some places, such as Paris and Istanbul.

This sentence has structure and word choice errors: 'countries like Paris, Istanbul' treats cities as countries. The repetition 'and I would like to' is incomplete. Better to say 'I would like to visit some places, such as Paris and Istanbul.' Suggestion: use correct category words (cities not countries) and complete clauses; avoid unnecessary repetition.