Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Try: state your preference, give a reason with a specific example, and finish with a brief comment.

例: Not really. I don't enjoy taking photos of views because my pictures often come out blurry or poorly composed, so I usually let others take photos while I focus on enjoying the moment.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and one concrete example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking phrases like "because", "for example", or "such as" to organize your thoughts.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy architecture and historical buildings. For example, when I traveled to Europe last year I was fascinated by the ornate facades and narrow streets that reflected centuries of history.

提案: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific details and avoid hesitations and repeated phrases. Mention particular features (locations, seasons, colours) and use linking words like "because", "for instance", or "especially" to make your answer coherent.

例: I prefer views in my own country, especially in summer, because Mongolia's countryside is spectacular. For instance, I love watching sunsets over the steppe and hiking near the mountains, where the colors and open space feel very peaceful.

× Actually taking pictures is not my thing because when I try to pictures I ended up with so many bad quality pictures.

✓ Actually, taking pictures is not my thing because when I try to take pictures I end up with so many low-quality photos.

Error: incorrect verb form and noun choice. 'try to pictures' mixes infinitive and noun; correct form is 'try to take pictures' or 'try taking pictures'. 'ended up' should match present habitual context, so use 'end up'. 'bad quality pictures' is unnatural; use 'low-quality photos'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and consistent tense for habitual statements.

× So I don't really enjoy photographing different take photos of different views.

✓ So I don't really enjoy photographing different views or taking photos of different views.

Error: redundant and incorrect combination 'photographing different take photos'. Choose one gerund phrase: 'photographing different views' or 'taking photos of different views'. Suggestion: avoid combining two equivalent verbs and keep parallel structure.

× I think I prefer prefer views in urban areas because about a year ago when I traveled to Europe with my family, I saw so many beautiful buildings and like old buildings that keep keep the history of history of.

✓ I think I prefer views in urban areas because about a year ago when I traveled to Europe with my family, I saw so many beautiful old buildings that preserve history.

Errors: repeated words ('prefer prefer', 'keep keep', 'history of history of') and awkward phrasing. 'keep the history of' is awkward; use 'preserve history' or 'reflect history'. Also combine 'beautiful' and 'old' into 'beautiful old buildings'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use concise verb phrase.

× Actually I prefer views in my country Umm in summer.

✓ Actually, I prefer the views in my country in summer.

Error: missing definite article 'the' before 'views' when speaking about specific seasonal views. Also move 'in summer' to follow the noun for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the views' when referring to specific scenery and place time phrases appropriately.

× In summer Umm countryside in Mongolia is so beautiful, so many is so beautiful umm.

✓ In summer, the countryside in Mongolia is very beautiful.

Errors: disfluent filler words ('Umm'), missing article before 'countryside', and redundant/incorrect fragment 'so many is so beautiful'. Suggestion: remove fillers, include 'the' before 'countryside', and use a simple adjective phrase 'is very beautiful'.

× I really like to travel countryside and enjoy the views of sunset, beautiful mountains and.

✓ I really like to travel in the countryside and enjoy views of the sunset and the beautiful mountains.

Errors: missing preposition/article 'in the countryside'; parallel structure and listing incomplete (ends with 'and.'). Also 'views of sunset' should be 'views of the sunset' or 'sunsets'. Suggestion: use 'travel in the countryside', include articles 'the' where needed, and complete the list with parallel nouns.