Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it could be improved by adding one brief supporting detail and using a linking word to make it more natural. Also avoid absolute phrases like "I don't really enjoy" that sound hesitant — be confident. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and add a short reason or example.

例: Not really. I prefer to remember scenery with my own eyes rather than through a camera, because being present helps me notice small details like colors and sounds. For example, I often find photos don’t capture the atmosphere of a quiet sunrise.

提案: The answer directly states a preference but has errors and unclear word choices ("wheels", "severity"). Improve accuracy, correct vocabulary, and add a linking word plus a specific supporting detail. Keep responses concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside feels more peaceful and has wide open landscapes and fresher air. For instance, I enjoy walking along country lanes and looking across fields where the view is uninterrupted.

提案: Good direct answer with reasons, but improve grammar (plural/singular and tense), add a linking word and a specific example to sound more natural and effective. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use accurate collocations ("broaden my horizons", "different cultures and landscapes").

例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad broadens my horizons and exposes me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, seeing the architecture and coastal scenery in Spain gave me a fresh perspective compared with places at home.

× I prefer wheels in rural areas because the countryside offers a greater sense of peace and severity, with open landscape and fresher air.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside offers a greater sense of peace and serenity, with open landscapes and fresher air.

The student used 'wheels' which is incorrect in context; 'views' fits the question. 'Severity' is the wrong word; 'serenity' conveys peacefulness. 'Landscape' should be plural ('landscapes') to match 'open' and the general idea. These are word choice and singular/plural errors. Suggestion: choose vocabulary that matches meaning ('views', 'serenity') and make countable nouns plural when speaking generally ('landscapes').

× I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad broaden my horizon and expose me to different culture and landscape.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because travelling abroad broadens my horizons and exposes me to different cultures and landscapes.

The verbs 'broaden' and 'expose' need third person singular present tense ('broadens', 'exposes') to agree with the singular gerund phrase 'travelling abroad' as the subject. 'Horizon' should be plural ('horizons') in this idiom. 'Culture' and 'landscape' should be plural ('cultures', 'landscapes') when speaking generally about different countries. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with gerund subjects and pluralize nouns when referring to varied examples.