Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and correct basic grammar (e.g., "to taking" -> "to take", "a pictures" -> "pictures"). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words like "because" and "so" smoothly without filler words (uh, umm).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually use my mobile phone to photograph beautiful places I visit because it helps me remember those moments. For example, I take landscape photos when I hike so I can share them with friends later.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating words. Fix grammar ("a views" -> "views", "I love to prefer" -> "I prefer"). Provide specific reasons and an example, using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Finish your thought—avoid trailing off.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural and the air is cleaner. For example, I like photographing open fields and forests rather than crowded city streets because the scenery feels more peaceful and varied.

提案: Speak clearly and avoid repetition. Use a concise topic sentence ("I prefer views in Canada") and give 1–2 specific supporting details (mention mountains, lakes). Correct grammar ("I'm British Columbia" -> "British Columbia is" or "I’m from British Columbia"). Complete sentences and avoid unfinished statements.

例: I prefer views in Canada, especially in British Columbia, because of its diverse landscapes. For example, we have dramatic mountains, clear lakes and beautiful coastlines, which make it a great place for photography.

× Yes uh, I love to taking a pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views.

The verb 'love' is followed by the base verb or gerund. Use 'love taking' not 'love to taking'. Also 'a pictures' is incorrect article + plural noun combination; use 'pictures' without 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'love' + gerund (taking) and remove the unnecessary article.

× Uh, actually I have my mobile phone that I use to click pictures whenever I go go some beautiful places.

✓ Actually, I have my mobile phone that I use to take pictures whenever I go to some beautiful places.

Use 'take pictures' rather than 'click pictures' in standard English, and include the preposition 'to' before the destination ('go to some places'). Also remove the duplicated word 'go'. Suggestion: Say 'take pictures' and 'go to some beautiful places'.

× I love to capture the moments because umm, it will stay for a long period of time.

✓ I love to capture moments because they stay for a long time.

Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'moments' and simple present 'stay' fits habitual/general truth better than 'will stay'. 'The moments' is unnecessary; 'capture moments' is more natural. Also 'a long period of time' can be simplified to 'a long time'. Suggestion: Use simple present for general truths and match plural nouns with plural pronouns.

× Uh, actually, I love to prefer a views in the countryside area because, uh, they are more, uh, natural and beautiful because the environment is quite clean, uh, in a rural area as compared to the urban area.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in the countryside because they are more natural and beautiful, and the environment in rural areas is cleaner compared with urban areas.

'Love to prefer' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. 'a views' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'views'. Use consistent plurality ('rural areas') and comparative form 'cleaner' rather than 'quite clean'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer', match articles and nouns, and use comparative adjectives when comparing.

× Urban areas are mostly like adjusted buildings. I like the.

✓ Urban areas mostly have closely packed buildings. I do not prefer them.

Original sentence 'mostly like adjusted buildings' is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrase to convey meaning: 'mostly have closely packed buildings'. The fragment 'I like the.' is incomplete; complete the thought (here I assume the student means they do not like urban views). Suggestion: Avoid fragments; express full ideas with subject and verb.

× Umm, actually I prefer the views in in in here in Canada because I'm British Columbia is known well known for their beauty and there are a lot of views we can enjoy here like mountains, lake, beaches and many more.

✓ I prefer the views here in Canada because British Columbia is well known for its beauty and there are many places to enjoy, like mountains, lakes, beaches and more.

Remove duplicated 'in'. 'I'm British Columbia' is incorrect—should be 'British Columbia is'. Use 'its' to refer to British Columbia (singular), not 'their'. Use plural 'lakes'. 'A lot of views' is better expressed as 'many places to enjoy'. Suggestion: Fix subject identification, use correct possessive pronoun 'its', correct plural nouns and remove repeated words.

× And I am from.

✓ And I am from [your hometown].

The sentence is incomplete; it lacks the place the speaker is from. Provide the missing noun phrase to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Always finish sentences with the necessary information; here add the origin (e.g., 'I am from India').