Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子不够自然且有语法错误。回答应直接回应问题并用一到两句支持细节，避免冗长或不准确的表达。建议用简单明了的句型，注意主谓一致和固定搭配，例如 use “take photos of” 或 “photograph views”，以及用“interest”或“fascination about”替代不自然的表达。此外，可补充具体场景或原因以显得更具体。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like capturing landscapes because they help me remember places I’ve visited and share them with friends.

提案: 句子存在明显语法和连贯性问题（例如“I am prefer”错误、句子残缺）。应先给出直接回答，然后用一到两句具体理由支持，并使用连接词（because、so、and）。避免重复和碎句，注意复数/单数和形容词用法。

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up there. The countryside has peaceful scenery and open fields, which I find more relaxing than noisy city streets.

提案: 回答中有词汇和语法错误（如“wheels”应为“views”/“I first born”不正确）。回答偏离问题——考官问的是“本国还是其他国家”，而学生谈论的是乡村与城市对比。建议先直接回答国家偏好，再给出1–2条具体原因并用连接词，注意时态和语序。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up there and know the local countryside well. The landscapes are familiar, with wide open fields and clean rivers, and they feel more peaceful than places I’ve visited abroad.

× Yes, I like taking some pictures when we look different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures when we see different views.

句中“look different views”用法不自然。动词短语应为 “see different views” 或 “look at different views”。另外“some pictures” 在此处多余，通常直接说“taking pictures”。建议使用“see”或“look at”，并删除“some”。

× As far as I am concerned, taking pictures is a very wide channel to report my fascinating.

✓ As far as I am concerned, taking pictures is a very good way to show what fascinates me.

原句中“very wide channel”搭配不当，英文中不常用“wide channel”表达“方式”；“to report my fascinating”语法和用词都不正确，应该表达“展示使我着迷的东西”或“表达我的兴趣”。建议用“a very good way to show what fascinates me”或“a great way to express my interests”。

× I am prefer views in rural areas because I was born in rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I was born there.

“I am prefer”错误地用了进行时助动词“am”，正确应为简单现在时“I prefer”。另外“born in rural areas”可简化为“born there”以避免重复。

× Rural areas are a beautiful. And. Have beautiful.

✓ Rural areas are beautiful and have many lovely sights.

原句断句错误且缺少名词配合形容词“beautiful”。“are a beautiful”错误使用不定冠词且缺名词；“And. Have beautiful.”缺主语和完整谓语。建议合并为一个完整句子并补充名词，如“many lovely sights”。

× I prefer wheels in rural areas because I first born and raised in the countryside.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I was born and raised in the countryside.

原句有拼写或词语错误，“wheels”显然应为“views”。此外“I first born and raised”缺助动词，应为被动语态“was born”并与“raised”一起构成“was born and raised”。

× The scenery there is beautiful with open views and fresh air, and it feels much more peaceful than busy cities be.

✓ The scenery there is beautiful with open views and fresh air, and it feels much more peaceful than busy cities.

句末的“be”多余，破坏了句子的时态和结构。比较时应直接把“busy cities”作为比较对象，不加“be”。保持现在时态“feels”。

× For example, I often walk by river.

✓ For example, I often walk by the river.

“walk by river”缺定冠词，正确应为“walk by the river”或“walk by a river”。在英语中，表示特定或一般河流通常需要冠词。