Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms (e.g., “remember me” → “remind me”); use plural/singular consistently (“pictures,” “views”). Aim for no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views when I go out. For example, I often photograph landscapes or city streets with my family because the photos remind me of those moments. They are memorable and help me relive special times.

提案: Be direct and use a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words like “because” and “so.” Correct grammar: use plural/singular consistently (“views,” “countryside”), and simplify phrases (“gives me fresh air and helps me relax”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the countryside. The scenery is calm and beautiful, and it gives me fresh air and helps me relax after a hectic day.

提案: Answer the question directly, then explain briefly with clear linking words. Fix grammar and phrasing: use “views,” “remind me,” and avoid redundant connectors like “so” after “however.” Limit to 2–3 sentences and provide a specific detail about what you like about other countries’ views.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up here and the landscapes remind me of home and family. However, I would love to see views in other countries too, because they offer different cultures and unique scenery to explore.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different view when I go outside because it Remember Me how I seen when I go outside with my friend or my family.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I go outside because they remind me of how I saw things when I went out with my friends or family.

Errors: plural forms and verb forms. Use 'taking pictures' (noun plural) and 'different views' (plural) to match general meaning. 'Remember Me' is incorrect capitalization and structure; use 'they remind me' (subject reference to pictures). 'how I seen' is wrong; use past tense 'saw'. 'when I go outside with my friend or my family' should be past 'when I went out with my friends or family'. Suggestion: ensure noun plurals for general habits, use correct subject and verb agreement, and use simple past for past actions.

× This is memorable picture for me.

✓ This is a memorable picture for me.

Missing article 'a' before singular countable noun 'picture'. Use 'a memorable picture' to be grammatically correct. Also could be 'These are memorable pictures' if plural meant. Suggestion: remember singular countable nouns need an article.

× I prefer view of rural areas because I live in countryside area.

✓ I prefer the views of rural areas because I live in the countryside.

Use plural 'views' when speaking generally. Add definite article 'the' with 'countryside' and use 'in the countryside' not 'in countryside area'. Suggestion: use 'the countryside' and plural 'views' for general preferences.

× The environment of that place is serene and beautiful that give me fresh air and relaxed environment after my hectic schedule.

✓ The environment there is serene and beautiful, which gives me fresh air and a relaxed feeling after my hectic schedule.

Relative clause: use 'which gives' to refer to the environment (singular) and ensure subject-verb agreement 'gives'. 'relaxed environment' is awkward; 'a relaxed feeling' is clearer. Add article 'a' before 'relaxed feeling'. Suggestion: match verb to singular subject and choose collocations like 'gives me fresh air' and 'a relaxed feeling'.

× I prefer view in my own country because I grew up here and the landscape remind me of home and family.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I grew up here and the landscape reminds me of home and family.

Use plural 'views' for general preference and singular 'landscape' requires verb agreement 'reminds'. Add 'the' before 'views' to specify category. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches meaning and use correct subject-verb agreement.

× However, if I had the chance to view of see view of other countries, so I also experience of different culture and scenery.

✓ However, if I had the chance to see the views of other countries, I would also experience different cultures and scenery.

Original has redundant and incorrect phrases 'view of see view of' and wrong tense/structure. Use conditional form 'if I had the chance... I would...' for hypothetical. Use 'see the views' and plural 'cultures'. Remove unnecessary prepositions 'of' after 'experience'. Suggestion: simplify the verb phrase to 'see the views' and use correct conditional structure and plural nouns where appropriate.