Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答整体能表达喜好和举例，但有语法错误、词汇使用不准确、句子冗长且有口语填充词（如“Great”），需要改进句子结构和用词准确性。建议： 1) 开头直接给出主题句并控制在1句内，例如“I enjoy taking photos of different views.” 2) 用正确的动词形式和名词（trip → travel/going on trips；shoot → take；nature lives→wildlife）。 3) 用连接词简洁地补充细节，避免无意义的感叹词。示例中把时间和原因简洁连接。

例: I enjoy taking photos of different views. I usually take pictures when I go on trips with friends, for example last Sunday we visited a park and I took photos of the scenery, wildlife and my friends to remember the day.

提案: 回答表达了偏好但语言混乱、发音填充词多（MMM, well），有语法和词汇错误（skies grabs? 'the the'，'I went as a city'），缺乏连贯的支持细节。建议： 1) 删除口头填充词，直接给出主句。2) 使用恰当词汇描述城市景观（e.g. skyline, street life）。3) 用一个完整的例子句说明原因并保持句子连贯。

例: I prefer urban areas because I like the city skyline and the lively street scenes. For example, last Sunday I visited the city with friends, admired the skyline and chatted with locals while exploring the busy streets.

提案: 回答清晰、结构良好且理由明确，但细节可以更具体且语言可以更自然。注意最后的“traffic light”用法不太恰当（应该是 traffic or traffic rules）。建议： 1) 保持主题句然后用具体例子说明（列举一两个本国的景点或文化特点）。2) 使用合适的词汇如“traffic”或“transportation”代替“traffic light”。3) 可补充一句说明外國景色的吸引力以显示比较能力。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best local scenery and cultural sites. For example, I can visit famous temples and coastal landscapes without worrying about local transportation, which makes me feel more relaxed than when I travel abroad.

× For example, last Sunday I went with my friends and shoot some images of nature, nature lives and the shots of my friends so that I could memorize this. Great.

✓ For example, last Sunday I went with my friends and shot some images of nature, wildlife, and photos of my friends so that I could remember it.

句中使用了 went（过去式）表明整个句子在叙述过去的事情，动词 shoot 应使用过去式 shot 或过去分词形式（在完成时中）。根据上下文，这里需要过去式 shot。除此之外，'nature lives' 不自然，改为 'wildlife' 更准确；'memorize this' 在语境中应使用记住或回忆，改为 'remember it' 更地道。建议：当叙述过去发生的动作时，主要动词应使用过去式；注意词汇搭配（wildlife, photos）和代词指代一致性。

× MMM well for me I prefer urban areas because I think the skies grabs and the the people on the street is quite beautiful.

✓ Well, for me I prefer urban areas because I think the skyscrapers and the people on the street are quite beautiful.

原句中存在主谓不一致：主语 'the skies grabs and the people' 是复合主语，谓语应使用复数形式 be (are)。另外 'skies grabs' 是不正确的搭配，应该用 'skyscrapers'（摩天大楼）或 'skyline'（天际线），这里用 skyscrapers 更符合城市景观描述。建议：复合主语用复数动词，注意单词拼写和搭配，避免重复 'the the'。

× For example last Sunday I went as a city. Work with my friends and chat with the native speakers.

✓ For example, last Sunday I went to the city, worked with my friends, and chatted with native speakers.

原句有句子结构问题：'went as a city' 不合语法且不通顺，应该用 'went to the city' 表示去城市；后面用了不完整的断句 'Work with my friends and chat...'，需要与主句时态一致并改为过去式 'worked' 和 'chatted'。建议：保持时态一致，确保每个并列动词都有正确的形式并与主语一致，使用正确的介词短语（to the city）。

× For example last Sunday I went with my friends and shoot some images of nature, nature lives and the shots of my friends so that I could memorize this. Great.

✓ For example, last Sunday I went with my friends and shot some images of nature, wildlife, and photos of my friends so that I could remember them.

重复项：和第一条类似，'shoot' 应改为过去式 'shot'；此外代词指代需与复数名词一致，'this' 改为 'them' 指代前面的多张照片/场景更合适。建议：叙述过去事件时动词用过去式，代词要与先行词数一致。

× I prefer the views in my own country because I am more familiar with them.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I am more familiar with them.

该句总体正确，但常见改进是强调 'familiar with' 的固定搭配已正确使用，无需更改。这里提供解释：'familiar with' 是固定介词搭配，表示对某物熟悉。建议：保持该搭配的使用。