Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful about small grammatical errors and word choice, and make the response more concise with one clear topic sentence followed by a specific supporting detail. Correct singular/plural nouns ('a digital camera') and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'different kinds of scenery' and 'views' used repeatedly). Add a linking word if giving an extra point.

例: Yes — I enjoy photographing scenery, especially ocean views because the colour and light are very calming. For example, when I visit the coast I focus on reflections and waves to capture mood, so I usually use a digital camera to record fine details.

提案: Fix grammar and pronunciation errors and keep sentences clear and linked. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Correct 'Are also enjoy' to 'I also enjoy'. Provide a concrete example to make answer more vivid.

例: I prefer rural views because I love natural scenery and the peaceful atmosphere. For example, I enjoy walking by green trees and blue rivers, and I also appreciate the open space and fresh air, which help me relax.

提案: Expand slightly with a clear topic sentence and a specific supporting detail; avoid vague phrases like 'feeling of freshness' without example. Use linking words such as 'because' and give a brief example of what makes foreign scenery appealing.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and varied landscapes. For instance, I enjoy visiting coastal towns abroad to see unfamiliar colours and architectural contrasts, which feels refreshing and inspiring.

× I even brought a digital cameras so I can capture more details of the views.

✓ I even brought a digital camera so I could capture more details of the views.

The noun 'cameras' is plural but is preceded by the singular determiner 'a', causing a singular-plural mismatch. Change 'cameras' to the singular 'camera'. Also change 'can' to 'could' to keep past reference consistent with 'brought' (past tense) and to indicate ability at that past time. Suggestion: Use matching singular/plural forms (a camera, two cameras) and keep verb tense consistent.

× Are also enjoy the open space and the fresh air there.

✓ I also enjoy the open space and the fresh air there.

The sentence lacks a proper subject and has word order problems. 'Are' is incorrect here; the intended subject is 'I'. Replace 'Are' with 'I' and maintain correct subject-verb order: 'I also enjoy...'. Suggestion: Ensure every clause has an explicit subject and correct subject-verb order.