Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clearer structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and why), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., “I’m not interested,” “when I’m on vacation,” “I always take photos”) and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: I’m not usually interested in photography, but I do take photos when I travel. For example, when I visited Turkey I took many pictures of landscapes because I like to remember special places and show them to my family when I return.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and concise. Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Reduce hesitation words (uh) and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: I prefer rural areas because they feel more peaceful and atmospheric. For example, when I visited a village in Germany the scenery was very cozy and I enjoyed the quiet streets and green fields much more than busy cities.

提案: Clarify and organize your response: state a clear preference (or say you like both) and give concise reasons with a specific example. Correct grammar (e.g., “it depends,” “I mostly like watching landmarks,” “there were incredible views”). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid wordiness.

例: I enjoy views in my own country, especially famous landmarks, but I also appreciate scenery abroad. For instance, when I went to Turkey I saw incredible coastal views that were very memorable and stayed in my mind for a long time.

× Honestly I don't interested in it, but when I on vacation maybe in some different country, for example Turkey.

✓ Honestly, I'm not interested in it, but when I am on vacation in another country, for example Turkey, I am.

Errors: incorrect verb 'don't interested' should be 'I'm not interested' (auxiliary be + adjective); missing verb 'am' in 'when I on vacation' should be 'when I am on vacation'; 'some different country' is unnatural; use 'another country'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary and adjective structures ('be' + adjective), ensure subject-verb presence, and prefer 'another' for a non-specific different country.

× So yes, I'm always take picture when I see some beautiful view because when I come to my country I really enjoy watch it and memorize.

✓ So yes, I always take pictures when I see a beautiful view because when I return to my country I really enjoy looking at it and remembering it.

Errors: 'I'm always take' mixes present continuous auxiliary with simple present; use 'I always take'. 'take picture' needs plural 'pictures'. 'when I come to my country' should be 'return to my country' for past visits; 'enjoy watch' requires gerund 'enjoy looking at'; 'memorize' is transitive and wrong context — use 'remember' or 'remembering it'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, pluralize countable nouns, and use correct verb+gerund patterns and verbs ('remember').

× I like more rural areas, uh, because, uh, it is, I don't know why when I was in, uh, Germany village, the view, uh, view and how look this country was so cozy and atmospheric.

✓ I prefer rural areas because, I don't know why, when I was in a German village the views and the look of the country were so cozy and atmospheric.

Errors: 'I like more rural areas' is awkward — use 'I prefer rural areas'; 'Germany village' should be 'a German village'; 'the view, view and how look this country' is ungrammatical — use 'the views and the look of the country'; subject-verb agreement: 'views ... were'. Suggestion: use 'a/an + adjective + noun' for nationality adjectives, simplify wording, and match plural subjects with plural verbs.

× So I would like more rural than, uh, urban areas.

✓ So I would prefer rural areas to urban areas.

Errors: 'like more rural than urban areas' is incorrect comparative structure. Use 'prefer X to Y' or 'like X more than Y'. Suggestion: use the correct comparative construction 'prefer A to B' or 'like A more than B' and include parallel nouns.

× Yeah, I like in my country, but it is depends like I mostly like watch landmark some landmarks because for it is a very good view, but also I like views from in other countries.

✓ Yes, I like the views in my country, but it depends. I mostly like watching some landmarks because they offer very good views, but I also like views in other countries.

Errors: 'I like in my country' missing noun — use 'the views in my country'; 'it is depends' should be 'it depends'; 'I mostly like watch landmark some landmarks' has word order and verb errors — 'mostly like watching some landmarks'; 'for it is a very good view' should be 'because they offer very good views'; 'from in other countries' redundant prepositions — use 'in other countries'. Suggestion: use correct articles with nouns, correct verb forms ('watching'), proper word order, and correct prepositions.

× For example, when I was in Turkey, there was a so incredible views.

✓ For example, when I was in Turkey, there were some incredible views.

Errors: 'there was a so incredible views' mixes singular 'was' with plural 'views' and uses wrong modifier 'a so'. Use 'there were some incredible views' or 'there were so many incredible views'. Suggestion: match 'there was/were' to the noun number and use appropriate quantifiers ('some' or 'so many').

× It's so memorable and I will be it will be in my memory, I think for a long time.

✓ They're so memorable and I think they will stay in my memory for a long time.

Errors: 'It's so memorable' uses singular for plural 'views' — use 'They're so memorable'; the phrase 'I will be it will be in my memory' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'I think they will stay in my memory'. Suggestion: keep noun/pronoun agreement in number and use a single, clear future structure ('will stay').