Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Work on grammatical accuracy, sentence fluency and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition (e.g. avoid "it's it's"). Use correct noun forms and articles ("pictures," "scenery," "greenery").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because natural scenery helps me relax. For example, I often photograph parks and rivers where the lush greenery and reflections in the water create calming compositions. Additionally, the soft morning light usually makes the photos feel peaceful and serene.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and expand with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "so much"; instead list what you like about urban views (architecture, street life, lights). Keep the response within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a lot of visual interest. For instance, the mix of modern and historic architecture, busy streets, and colourful shopfronts give me varied subjects to photograph. Also, city lights at night produce striking contrasts that make pictures more dramatic.

提案: Clarify the topic sentence and correct grammar mistakes. Avoid repetition ("different different"). Provide two specific examples of diversity in your country and link them logically. Use more precise adjectives than "super" and fix article use ("the greenery").

例: I prefer views in my own country because India offers tremendous variety. For example, in one trip I can photograph both ancient temples with intricate architecture and modern glass skyscrapers, and in another region I can capture lush tea plantations and colourful street markets. This diversity in landscapes, architecture, and food culture keeps photography exciting for me.

× Yes, I like to take picture of different scenery because I really admire the greeneries everywhere.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different scenery because I really admire the greenery everywhere.

The sentence uses incorrect articles and count forms. 'Take picture' should be plural 'take pictures' when speaking generally. 'Different scenery' is acceptable, but 'the greeneries' is incorrect: 'greenery' is an uncountable noun for plants and foliage, so use 'greenery' without 'the' or plural -ies. Suggestion: use 'pictures' and 'greenery' to match natural English usage.

× It's it's just feel so peace and calm.

✓ It just feels so peaceful and calm.

Subject-verb agreement and word form errors: 'It' is third-person singular and requires the verb 'feels' (adds -s). 'Feel' should be 'feels'. 'Peace' is a noun; the adjective 'peaceful' is needed to modify the state. Also remove the repeated 'it's'. Suggestion: use 'It just feels so peaceful and calm.'

× I prefer views in urban areas as it has so much.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas as they have so much to offer.

Pronoun and agreement issue: 'views' is plural, so referring pronoun should be 'they' not 'it', and the verb should agree: 'have' not 'has'. Also the phrase 'so much' is vague; common collocation is 'so much to offer.' Suggestion: replace 'it has so much' with 'they have so much to offer.'

× I prefer using our in my own country as a as India is a wide variety of different different cities, different different culture, different different foods.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because India has a wide variety of different cities, cultures, and foods.

This sentence has multiple structural errors: unnecessary words ('using our', repeated 'as a as'), incorrect clause linking, and repetition 'different different'. 'Prefer using our' is ungrammatical here; the intended meaning is 'I prefer views in my own country.' Also 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' to match 'cities' and 'foods.' Suggestion: simplify the sentence to 'I prefer views in my own country because India has a wide variety of different cities, cultures, and foods.'

× I mean like everything is just different. The architecture, the area, the greeneries, everything is just super.

✓ I mean, everything is just different: the architecture, the areas, the greenery — everything is just wonderful.

Word choice and number agreement issues: 'the area' should be plural 'the areas' to match listing of multiple things. 'The greeneries' is incorrect; use uncountable 'greenery.' 'Super' is informal and vague; 'wonderful' or 'great' is clearer. Also punctuation and filler words can be reduced. Suggestion: use parallel plural nouns and appropriate adjectives: 'the architecture, the areas, the greenery — everything is just wonderful.'