Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более связно и грамматически правильно: используйте полные предложения, избегайте пауз и звуков (uh, umm). Дайте одно ясное вводное предложение, затем 1–2 конкретных поддерживающих детали (когда и что вы фотографируете). Практикуйте простые фразы в Present Simple/Continuous и проверьте согласование числительных и существительных (a lot of pictures → a lot of photos).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos, especially when I travel. I usually photograph landscapes and historical landmarks, and I also like to take pictures of myself in interesting places.

提案: Избегайте повторов и наполнителей; стройте ответ по схеме: тема → причина → пример. Используйте связующие слова (for example, because, also) для логики. Сформулируйте чёткое предпочтение или скажите «both» и объясните коротко с конкретным примером.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers different attractions. For example, in Paris I enjoyed the city’s architecture and lively streets, while nearby countryside provided peaceful natural scenery.

提案: Сформулируйте полный ответ: начните с прямого утверждения (I prefer...), затем приведите конкретные причины и закончите завершённым предложением. Избегайте оборванных фраз. Используйте точные слова (relax, atmosphere) и корректную грамматику (we have → we have places).

例: Although Kazakhstan has beautiful nature and many scenic spots, I prefer taking photos in other countries because they offer different cultures and unique architecture that I cannot find at home.

× Uh, yes, of course I'm, I like taking pictures.

✓ Uh, yes, of course I like taking pictures.

The student inserted an unnecessary auxiliary 'I'm' before 'I like', which creates an incorrect continuous construction. Remove 'I'm' to form the simple present 'I like' to express a habitual action.

× Umm, usually I'm taking picture, uh, on, uh, when I'm traveling,

✓ Umm, usually I take pictures when I travel,

The phrase 'I'm taking picture' is incorrect for habitual action; use simple present 'I take pictures'. Use plural 'pictures'. Replace 'when I'm traveling' with 'when I travel' for normal habitual context.

× No, a lot of pictures in my phone.

✓ No, I have a lot of pictures on my phone.

Missing subject and verb; 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. Add 'I have' to form a complete clause. 'A lot of' is fine but needs a noun 'pictures' which is present.

× Uh, there landscape is historical landmarks and, uh, pictures with me.

✓ They are landscapes and historical landmarks, and some pictures include me.

Sentence has incorrect structure and noun/pronoun mismatch. 'There landscape is' is wrong; use 'They are landscapes and historical landmarks'. Add 'some' and 'include me' to clarify that pictures have the student.

× I prefer both, uh, because like, umm, I was in Paris, this is city, uh, this is uh, urban areas, uh, and uh, uh, near to the parish, uh, parish have a rural areas and uh, it's also amazing, have also amazing views, uh.

✓ I prefer both because I was in Paris; it is a city and an urban area, and near Paris there are rural areas which are also amazing and have beautiful views.

Mixed tenses and number agreement: 'this is city' should be 'it is a city'; 'urban areas' vs singular; 'near to the parish' should be 'near Paris'; 'parish have a rural areas' should be 'there are rural areas' or 'Paris has rural areas'. Use plural agreement 'areas are' and clearer relative clauses.

× My country is Kazakhstan.

✓ My country is Kazakhstan.

This sentence is correct. 'My country is Kazakhstan' uses proper article omission for country names; no change needed.

× Kazakhstan has very beautiful nature.

✓ Kazakhstan has very beautiful natural scenery.

'Nature' is not wrong but 'natural scenery' is more idiomatic when talking about views and pictures. Use simple present 'has' for a general fact.

× You can take amazing pictures in my country and you can we have a place where we can take relax and feeling the vibe.

✓ You can take amazing pictures in my country, and we have places where we can relax and enjoy the atmosphere.

Original mixes second person 'you' and 'we' and has incorrect verb forms 'take relax' and 'feeling the vibe'. Use consistent subject 'we' or 'you'; correct verbs: 'relax' (base verb) and 'enjoy the atmosphere' for idiomatic English.

× But I more prefer other countries because in other countries you can.

✓ But I prefer other countries more because you can experience different cultures and scenery there.

'I more prefer' is unidiomatic; use 'I prefer... more' or 'I prefer...'. Sentence fragment 'you can.' must be completed. Provide object like 'experience different cultures and scenery' to complete thought.