Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid repetition. Use linking words and more precise vocabulary (e.g. "keeps memories" instead of "will be like memories"). Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos because they keep memories of places I visit. For example, I often photograph landscapes and street scenes so I can remember the mood of a trip later.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a supporting detail. Avoid fillers (uh) and vague phrases like "more good." Use precise adjectives and a linking word to connect reason and example.

例: I prefer views in rural areas. I find the countryside calmer and the people friendlier, so I feel more relaxed there; for instance, villagers often help visitors and show local attractions.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar errors, and give a concise, coherent answer. Start with a clear statement (e.g. "I prefer views in my own country"), then give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best natural spots and feel comfortable there. For example, I often visit a nearby lake that helps me relax and where locals are welcoming.

× Yes, I like because it will be like memories and something which will remember my journey.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because they become memories and help me remember my journey.

Original sentence has unclear subject and awkward structure. 'I like' needs an object ('taking pictures'). 'It will be like memories' uses singular 'it' incorrectly and awkward 'like'; use plural 'they become memories'. 'Something which will remember my journey' is incorrect because things do not 'remember' people; use 'help me remember my journey'. Suggest using clear subjects and verbs and matching plural forms.

× Uh, I prefer rural areas because, uh, it is more like their peoples are more good and more helpful and more kind, so.

✓ Uh, I prefer rural areas because the people there are nicer, more helpful, and kinder.

Problems include pronoun/place order and agreement: 'it is more like their peoples are more good' is ungrammatical. Use 'the people there' to refer to residents of rural areas. 'Peoples' is incorrect here (means ethnic groups) and 'more good' should be 'nicer' or 'better'. Use parallel adjectives 'nicer, more helpful, and kinder' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer abuse in my own country because my in my country I I enjoy a lot. I know some natural views which makes me relax and there are also many helpful and friendly environment and.

✓ I prefer staying in my own country because I enjoy it a lot. I know some natural spots that help me relax, and there is also a helpful, friendly environment.

Multiple issues: 'prefer abuse' is likely a wrong word choice; replace with 'prefer staying' or 'prefer being'. Remove duplicated 'my in my country I I'. 'Natural views which makes me relax' has subject-verb agreement: 'views... make me relax' or better 'spots that help me relax'. 'Many helpful and friendly environment' mixes plural/ singular; use 'a helpful, friendly environment' or 'many helpful and friendly people/environmental features'. Suggest proofreading for wrong word choices, removing repetitions, and ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct singular/plural forms.