Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly with correct grammar and a concise topic sentence. Start by directly answering, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I visit a busy park I like to capture candid shots of people and the scenery. Also, I sometimes go to parks with friends to take landscape photos because the variety of scenes makes interesting compositions.

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct preference and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use concrete details (what kinds of views, why they are better) and avoid vague wording.

例: I prefer rural views rather than urban ones because the countryside is quieter and less crowded. For instance, rolling hills and open fields allow me to compose unobstructed landscape photos, and the natural light there is often better for photography.

提案: Answer directly and use clear examples. State your preference, then give one or two specific places and reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Correct basic grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles).

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many beautiful and familiar places to explore. For example, I enjoy photographing historical sites like the Madhav Temple in Kathmandu and the lakes and mountains around Pokhara, which offer varied scenery and cultural interest.

× Yes, so I like taking picture of different view because or if there are some numbers of people was going to a park visit so can take over photo.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because if a number of people go to a park, I can take photos of them.

The student used singular nouns where plurals were needed ('picture' -> 'pictures', 'view' -> 'views') and had extra words; also 'numbers of people' should be 'a number of people'. Use plural nouns when referring to multiple items. Suggestion: use 'pictures' and 'views' when speaking about more than one, and simplify the clause to 'if a number of people go to a park, I can take photos of them.'

× Yes, so I like taking picture of different view because or if there are some numbers of people was going to a park visit so can take over photo.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because if a number of people go to a park, I can take photos of them.

The original used 'was going' incorrectly for a general situation. For habitual or general actions use the simple present ('people go'). Suggestion: use simple present for regular or general events: 'people go'. Replace 'was going' with 'go'.

× Yes, so I like taking picture of different view because or if there are some numbers of people was going to a park visit so can take over photo.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because if a number of people go to a park, I can take photos of them.

The sentence is disorganized with filler words ('so', 'or') and unclear phrases ('take over photo'). Reorganize to a clear subject-verb-object order and remove fillers. Suggestion: make one clear conditional clause followed by the result: 'If X, I can Y.'

× Yes, I prefer views for a rural area because number of people can go into a rural area because he was not disturbed for anythings and we can take for photos.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in rural areas because fewer people go there, so we are not disturbed and we can take photos.

Errors: 'views for a rural area' should be 'views in rural areas'; 'number of people' should be 'fewer people' when referring to a smaller quantity; 'anythings' is incorrect plural and unnecessary. Use plural 'areas' when speaking generally and use 'fewer' for countable smaller amounts. Suggestion: say 'in rural areas' and 'fewer people'.

× Yes, I prefer views for a rural area because number of people can go into a rural area because he was not disturbed for anythings and we can take for photos.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in rural areas because fewer people go there, so we are not disturbed and we can take photos.

The sentence uses 'he' incorrectly to refer to people in general. Use 'they' or passive/impersonal constructions. Suggestion: use 'people go there' or 'we are not disturbed'. Also remove unnecessary prepositions like 'for' before 'photos'.

× Yes, I like also going to my friends in a different park and.

✓ I also like going to my friends' houses in different parks.

Original is incomplete and uses wrong object: 'going to my friends in a different park' is unclear. If visiting friends, use possessive 'friends'' and say 'houses' or 'meeting my friends in different parks'. Suggestion: complete the sentence and use correct possessive and noun forms: 'I also like visiting my friends in different parks.'

× This yes, it is a very good question. So I will be preferred for view in the my my country because if there are a very new places visit area as like Kathmandu as like Madhav temple, Pokhara visiting.

✓ Yes, that's a very good question. I prefer views in my country because there are many new places to visit, such as Kathmandu, the Madhav temple, and Pokhara.

The speaker mixed future passive 'will be preferred' and awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'I prefer' for a general preference. Also correct 'the my my country' to 'my country' and use 'many new places to visit'. Suggestion: use 'I prefer' for general preferences and list examples with 'such as'.

× This yes, it is a very good question. So I will be preferred for view in the my my country because if there are a very new places visit area as like Kathmandu as like Madhav temple, Pokhara visiting.

✓ Yes, that's a very good question. I prefer views in my country because there are many new places to visit, such as Kathmandu, the Madhav temple, and Pokhara.

Problems: incorrect prepositions 'preferred for view in the my my country' should be 'prefer views in my country'; 'places visit area' should be 'places to visit'. Use 'in' with 'country' and 'to' with 'visit'. Suggestion: use 'prefer X in Y' and 'places to visit'.