Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly repetitive and could be more concise with clearer linking. Aim to use a topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and a brief concluding remark. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “views” and “pictures”) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “take the pictures” → “take pictures”, “for memory” → “as memories”).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often take sunset photos from the high-rise building where I live because the colors are calming after a long day. For instance, last week I captured a vivid orange sky that I shared with friends and saved as a memory.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but the answer has repetition and an unclear phrase (“yet affected by the developments and hiring”). Replace vague or incorrect words, use linking words (e.g., “because” and “for example”), and add a specific detail to support your preference. Keep to 2–3 sentences to be more concise.

例: I prefer rural views because of the abundant greenery and untouched landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing quiet fields and forests where the scenery feels natural and peaceful, unlike busy city streets.

提案: Good clear answer with a specific example. To improve, add a brief linking phrase to connect the reason and the example, and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “skyscrapers,” “skyline,” “architectural design”). Also try a short concluding comment about how these views influence you (e.g., inspire creativity).

例: I prefer views in other countries because many cities abroad feature impressive skyscrapers and dramatic skylines. For example, Dubai and Hong Kong have striking waterfront panoramas and unique architectural designs that I find inspiring and which often motivate me to take more creative photographs.

× 'I take the pictures of the sunsets from the high rise building where I live.'

✓ 'I take pictures of the sunsets from the high-rise building where I live.'

'Subject-verb agreement errors (27) often overlap with article and noun form issues. In this sentence the phrase "the pictures" is not wrong for plural but sounds unnatural after "take" when speaking generally; native speakers usually say "take pictures". Also "high rise" should be hyphenated as a compound adjective modifying "building". Suggestion: use 'take pictures' for general activity and hyphenate compound adjectives.'

× 'I find the view quite relaxing after a long day of work and the beautiful shots I get.'

✓ 'I find the view quite relaxing after a long day of work and I enjoy the beautiful shots I get.'

'Article errors (22) is applicable because the sentence lacks a clear verb for the second clause and the intended meaning is unclear; this is also a sentence structure issue. The original has two noun phrases joined by 'and' without a verb for the second part. Adding 'I enjoy' clarifies the action and completes the sentence. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a verb or join them properly.'

× 'I share them with friends or I keep them for memory.'

✓ 'I share them with friends or keep them as memories.'

'Sentence structure errors (26). The phrase "keep them for memory" is non-idiomatic English and the repetition of subject 'I' is unnecessary. Use 'keep them as memories' or 'keep them for memory's sake' to be natural. Suggestion: avoid literal translations and use common collocations like 'as memories'.'

× 'I prefer the views in rural areas because there are a lot of greens and untapped nature.'

✓ 'I prefer the views in rural areas because there is a lot of greenery and untouched nature.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (13) and related noun choice. 'Greens' is not the standard noun here; the uncountable noun 'greenery' is appropriate. 'Untapped' is acceptable but 'untouched' is more natural when referring to nature not affected by development. Suggestion: choose correct uncountable nouns and more precise adjectives.'

× 'I usually prefer the natural views, the greenery and the beautiful scene of nature of areas that are yet affected by the developments and hiring.'

✓ 'I usually prefer natural views, the greenery and the beautiful scenes in areas that are not yet affected by development and construction.'

'Sentence structure errors (26). The original is awkward and contains incorrect word choice: 'the beautiful scene of nature of areas' is redundant and unclear; 'yet affected by the developments and hiring' is incorrect—'not yet affected' needed and 'hiring' is wrong word. 'Development and construction' or 'development and urbanization' are appropriate. Suggestion: simplify the noun phrases and use accurate vocabulary.'

× 'I prefer the views in other countries because many cities abroad have impressive high rise buildings which I rarely see at home.'

✓ 'I prefer the views in other countries because many cities abroad have impressive high-rise buildings that I rarely see at home.'

'Singular and plural issue (1) is partly relevant because 'high rise buildings' should be 'high-rise buildings' as a compound adjective; also use 'that' rather than 'which' for restrictive clauses in spoken English. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives and use 'that' for essential clauses.'