Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và rõ ràng. Tránh bận lọc tiếng ồn (um, uh), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, và sửa thì/động từ để câu chính xác. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích chụp, khi nào và bằng thiết bị gì) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines with my phone or a small camera. I usually share these photos with friends online, and taking pictures also helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (article, subject-verb agreement), tránh lặp từ và filler, và trình bày lý do cụ thể hơn. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes. For example, I like wide fields and forests since they are peaceful and help me reduce stress, so I often visit the countryside at weekends.

提案: Cần tránh khẳng định tổng quát thiếu bằng chứng và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Thay vì nói phủ định hoàn toàn, hãy nêu quan điểm lịch sự và cụ thể hơn (ví dụ nêu vấn đề ô nhiễm ở nơi bạn sống và so sánh một vài tính năng khác biệt). Tránh fillers và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ.

例: I prefer views in other countries because many places I have seen abroad are cleaner and better maintained. For instance, beaches and parks in some countries are less polluted and offer more scenic spots for sightseeing, so I enjoy visiting them more.

× Yes, I really like taking pictures because it helped me uh, save a beautiful view in my phone and umm camera so I can share it with my friends and talk about it with them.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures because it helps me save beautiful views on my phone and camera so I can share them with my friends and talk about them.

'helped' is past tense but context is general preference so present simple 'helps' is required (Present tense issue - ID 6). 'a beautiful view' should be plural 'beautiful views' to match general statement (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'umm camera' redundant; use 'and my camera'. 'so I can share it with my friends and talk about it with them' should use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to multiple 'views' (Incorrect use of pronouns - ID 12). Suggestion: use present simple for habits, correct prepositions ('on' for devices), match plural nouns and pronouns.

× Umm especially is help me relax and relieve.

✓ Umm, especially it helps me relax and relieve stress.

Original lacks correct subject-verb order and missing object: 'is help me' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'it helps me'. Also 'relieve' requires an object such as 'stress' (Sentence structure errors - ID 26; Verb usage - implicitly Present tense issue ID 6). Suggestion: include subject 'it', use present simple 'helps', and add object 'stress'.

× Uh, I prefer view in a rural areas because umm, I really want, uh, enjoy the natural beautiful, the beautiful natural and umm, I think it's have me really stress because it's very beautiful.

✓ Uh, I prefer views in rural areas because I really want to enjoy the beautiful nature, and I think it relieves my stress because it's very beautiful.

'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'a rural areas' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'rural areas' or 'a rural area' (Article errors/number mismatch - ID 22 and ID 1). 'I really want, uh, enjoy' needs 'to' before verb: 'want to enjoy' (Verb + -ing/form issue - ID 8 or infinitive missing; map to Sentence structure/verb form ID 26). 'the natural beautiful, the beautiful natural' incorrect word order; use 'beautiful nature' (Incorrect order of adjectives ID 18 or Incorrect use of adjectives ID 13). 'I think it's have me really stress' incorrect verb form; use 'it relieves my stress' or 'it makes me less stressed' (Subject-verb agreement / Verb form issues ID 27 and ID 6). Suggestion: use correct pluralization, articles, infinitive 'to enjoy', adjective-noun order, and correct verb 'relieves' with object 'my stress'.

× I think I prefer view in other countries because as my country not have any beautiful views and is umm very polluted so I don't like to enjoy this view.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because my country does not have many beautiful views and is very polluted, so I don't like to enjoy its scenery.

'prefer view' should be 'prefer views' for general preference (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'as my country not have' requires auxiliary 'does not have' (Third person singular issue / Present tense issue - IDs 2 and 6). 'any beautiful views' fine but 'not have any' is awkward; 'does not have many beautiful views' is natural (Incorrect quantifier use - ID 14). 'is umm very polluted' correct subject but punctuation and filler removal recommended. 'I don't like to enjoy this view' awkward; better 'I don't like its scenery' or 'I don't enjoy this view' (Sentence structure error ID 26). Suggestion: use 'does not have', pluralize 'views', and rephrase final clause to 'I don't enjoy its scenery'.