Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, coherent and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “To education I click excitement.” Focus on why you enjoy it and give a concrete example (where or what you photograph). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I especially enjoy photographing city skylines and mountain landscapes because they capture unique light and mood. For example, last month I photographed a coastal sunrise and was excited by the colors and reflections on the water.

提案: Give a clear preference and justify it with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid saying you are unfamiliar; instead choose one option and explain why, then provide a short example. Keep answers natural and concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful landscapes and open space, which help me relax. For instance, I like taking photos of rice fields and small villages where the natural light is softer than in the city.

提案: Be decisive and compare both options briefly. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference, use a linking word to compare, and give a specific reason or example for each. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeated words.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and feel a stronger connection to the landscape. However, I also enjoy views abroad because they offer different architecture and culture; for example, I loved photographing traditional markets when I visited a neighboring country.

× I like taking a picture of different view like when I go.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views when I go somewhere.

The original sentence mixes singular and plural incorrectly: 'a picture' and 'different view' should be plural to match the general idea of taking photos of many scenes. Change 'a picture of different view' to 'pictures of different views'. Also streamline 'like when I go' to 'when I go somewhere' for clarity.

× To education I click excitement.

✓ When I visit educational places I take photos that excite me.

The original is unclear and uses 'To education' incorrectly; 'education' needs context and articles. 'Click' is informal for taking photos; use 'take photos'. Rephrase to 'When I visit educational places' and specify purpose: 'I take photos that excite me.' This corrects article and word choice issues.

× I'm not too familiar so I don't know about too much.

✓ I'm not very familiar, so I don't know much about them.

The sentence structure is awkward and uses 'too much' incorrectly. Use 'not very familiar' and 'I don't know much about them' to refer back to the topics (urban and rural views). This fixes the sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.

× And that type of view like urban area and rural area.

✓ I mean the types of views in urban and rural areas.

This fragment is ungrammatical and needs rephrasing. 'That type of view like urban area and rural area' should be 'the types of views in urban and rural areas' to be grammatical and clear.

× So I prefer In my opinion urban area and rural area are two different things.

✓ In my opinion, urban areas and rural areas are two different things, so I prefer one over the other depending on the situation.

The original mixes sentences and misuses capitalization ('In'). Use present tense 'are' correctly and pluralize 'areas'. Add a linking clause to connect preference to the observation. This corrects tense and capitalization and clarifies meaning.

× I do. I prefer.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer views in my own country.

Short fragments 'I do. I prefer.' are incomplete without an object. Specify what is preferred: 'views in my own country.' This fixes sentence structure by providing a complete thought.

× View in my own country and and when I go to other country I prefer in seeing other other views in other country so.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, and when I go to other countries I like seeing different views there.

Multiple errors: 'View' should be plural 'views'; 'country' should be plural 'countries' when speaking generally; remove duplicated words 'and and' and 'other other'. Rephrase 'I prefer in seeing' to 'I like seeing' for natural English. This corrects plurality and word order.