Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторы и уточните мысль, добавив связки и конкретику. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем кратко объясните причину и приведите пример. Избегайте тавтологии («not unusual spot») и неправильных выражений; используйте «unique» или «unusual» правильно.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos when I travel because I like capturing unique places. For example, on my last trip to the mountains I photographed sunrise over the valley to remember the colours and atmosphere.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более уверенно и логично: начните с чёткого утверждения, затем приведите конкретные причины и пример. Уберите неуверенные слова («maybe») и повторения («not usual for me»/«so that's why I prefer»). Добавьте связочное слово для последовательности.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer peace and natural beauty. For instance, I enjoy walking in quiet countryside fields where I can relax and take clear photos away from city noise.

提案: Сделайте ответ более грамматически корректным и конкретным: начните с прямого ответа («I prefer views in other countries»), затем объясните причины с примерами. Избегайте неясных формулировок («doesn't exist or really meet in») и используйте правильную структуру предложений.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more novel and interesting. For example, when I visited Japan I was fascinated by the unique architecture and traditional streets that I don't see at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures when I am going traveling because it seems something special for me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures when I travel because it feels special to me.

The phrase 'going traveling' is awkward; after 'when' use the simple present 'travel' for habitual actions (Grammar problem type 8 & 6). 'Seems something special for me' has incorrect structure: use 'feels special to me'. Use simple present for routines and correct verb+adjective collocation.

× It's not unusual spot and there are beautiful scenes.

✓ It's not an ordinary spot, and there are beautiful scenes.

Missing article before 'unusual spot' and poor word choice 'unusual' with 'not' creates confusion. Use 'an ordinary spot' or 'not a usual spot'. Also join clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity (Grammar problem types 22 and 26).

× So I like taking pictures especially when I'm traveling.

✓ So I like taking pictures, especially when I travel.

Use simple present 'I travel' for habitual actions instead of present continuous 'I'm traveling'. Removing continuous makes the sentence more natural for routines (Grammar problem type 10 & 6).

× I prefer rural areas because maybe I'm from the big city and I usually work in crowded areas, so rural areas are not usual for me and there are a lot of beautiful things and nature so that's why I prefer.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I'm from a big city and usually work in crowded places, so rural areas are unusual for me and full of beautiful nature, which is why I prefer them.

Problems: article use 'the big city' -> 'a big city'; 'crowded areas' -> 'crowded places' (style); 'not usual for me' -> 'unusual for me'; missing plural reference 'them' for rural areas. Also run-on sentence needs commas and conjunctions. Adjust prepositions and articles for natural phrasing (Grammar problem types 11, 22, 26).

× I prefer it as a countries where I'm not usually in because it's unusual for me so everything is special.

✓ I prefer countries where I don't usually go because they are unfamiliar to me, so everything feels special.

Incorrect pronoun 'it' and 'a countries' (number mismatch). Avoid ending with preposition 'in'; use 'go' or 'visit'. Use plural agreement 'they are'. This fixes pronoun and number agreement and preposition issues (Grammar problem types 12, 1, 11, 27).

× Like the building is completely different and there are a lot of buildings that doesn't exist or really meet in.

✓ For example, the buildings are completely different, and there are many buildings that don't exist where I live.

Issues: 'the building is' should be plural 'the buildings are' to match context; 'a lot of buildings that doesn't' -> 'don't' for plural subject; 'really meet in' is incorrect phrasing—use 'where I live' or 'in my country'. Correct subject-verb agreement and phrasing (Grammar problem types 27, 1, 26).