Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more grammatical, concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid unclear words (e.g., “you” should be “views”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. state you enjoy photographing different scenes, explain what you often photograph and why, and finish with a brief reason or example.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph coffee mugs and street scenes on my iPhone because these images remind me of places I’ve visited. Also, I like taking selfies occasionally to capture how I felt at that moment.

提案: Give a direct answer first (urban or rural), then provide clear, specific reasons linked with connectors. Fix grammar (e.g., “views” not “you”), remove repetition, and explain what about urban views appeals to you (architecture, activity, light). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of buildings and street life. For instance, the architecture and busy atmosphere give me interesting subjects to photograph, and when I look at the photos later I remember the emotions of that place.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific, organized reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “views in other countries,” “how developed it is,” “architecture”). Avoid repetition and be specific about what you notice (city layout, buildings, cultural differences). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I like seeing different styles of architecture and city planning. For example, when I travel I compare building designs and streetscapes, which helps me appreciate how developed or historic a place is.

× Yes, I would like taking picture of different you because it's my emotional like I always take a picture of coffee mug and press everywhere I go and I always take picture of myself too because I love it.

✓ Yes, I would like to take pictures of different views because it's emotional for me; I always take pictures of a coffee mug and press the shutter everywhere I go, and I always take pictures of myself too because I love it.

The phrase 'would like' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the -ing form (would like to take). Also 'take picture' needs plural or article: 'take pictures' or 'take a picture'. 'Different you' is likely 'different views' and 'my emotional like' is incorrect adjective/noun usage; corrected to 'emotional for me'. Use 'press the shutter' or 'press the button' rather than 'press' alone; kept 'press the shutter' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'would like to + base verb', use correct pluralization or articles, and use clear noun phrases for meaning.

× I don't know why too but I really enjoy to take a picture on my iPhone.

✓ I don't know why either, but I really enjoy taking pictures on my iPhone.

After 'enjoy' the verb should be in -ing form (enjoy taking). 'Too' at the end is informal; 'either' is more natural in negative contexts. Use plural 'pictures' when speaking generally. Suggestions: use 'enjoy + -ing' and use 'either' with negatives.

× I prefer with you in urban area because it's like I can see it from my eye and and I can see in real life and I feel emotional in public so I can take a picture to take so I can have the feeling again when I show it.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I can see them with my own eyes in real life, and I feel emotional in public so I can take pictures to capture that feeling and feel it again when I show them.

Preposition and noun errors: 'prefer with you in urban area' is incorrect; say 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer them in urban areas'. 'See it from my eye' should be 'see them with my own eyes'. 'Take a picture to take' is redundant; 'take pictures to capture that feeling' is clearer. Also plural consistency: 'areas', 'pictures', 'them'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions like 'with my own eyes', use plural forms for general statements, and avoid redundant phrases.

× I prefer view in other country because I I always want to see how big country and I want to see how this country is building, how good how good is it, how it might building, how building versus it and how beautiful is this city.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I always want to see how big a country is, how the country is built, how good it is, and how beautiful the city is.

Multiple pluralization and article errors: 'view' should be 'views', 'other country' should be 'other countries' for general preference. 'How big country' needs an article and verb: 'how big a country is'. 'How this country is building' is incorrect — use 'how the country is built' or 'how the country is being developed'. Repetitions removed and phrase order fixed: 'how good it is' and 'how beautiful the city is'. Suggestions: use plural forms for general preferences, include articles ('a' or 'the') where needed, and use correct adjective order and verb forms.