Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban terlalu singkat dan tidak jelas. Perbaiki tata bahasa (mis: double 'just', 'taking photo' -> 'taking photos'), berikan struktur topik lalu dukungan singkat, dan gunakan linking word jika perlu. Contoh fokus: nyatakan preferensi lalu jelaskan alasan singkat dengan detail relevan.

例: Not really. I don’t often take photos of different views because I usually prefer capturing people and moments. For example, I enjoy photographing my friends at events since their expressions tell a story, so landscapes feel less interesting to me.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa (mis: 'in the urban area' -> 'urban areas', 'an extrovert people' -> 'an extrovert person') dan singkirkan pengulangan. Mulai dengan topik jelas, lalu berikan alasan spesifik dan contoh singkat. Gunakan linking word seperti 'because' atau 'so'.

例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the energy and variety they offer. For example, busy streets and cafes give me interesting subjects to photograph, and as an extrovert I like scenes with many people and activities.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kejelasan (mis: 'I extremely like in the other countries' -> 'I strongly prefer other countries'), hindari pengulangan 'in the other countries'. Beri alasan spesifik tentang apa yang ingin dipelajari dan contoh konkret. Gunakan linking words seperti 'because' dan 'for example'.

例: I strongly prefer views in other countries because they allow me to learn about different cultures and traditions. For example, visiting markets abroad teaches me about local foods and crafts, which gives me new ideas for photography and storytelling.

× No, I just spend my time just taking photo.

✓ No, I just spend my time taking photos.

The verb 'spend' is followed by a gerund, so 'taking' is correct but 'just' is repeated unnecessarily and 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match general activity. Remove the extra 'just' and use plural noun for habitual action.

× It's same feels.

✓ It feels the same.

The original word order is incorrect. Use the subject 'It' + verb 'feels' + complement 'the same'. Also 'same' needs the definite article 'the' when used as a complement.

× I prefer in the urban area because it is crowded area and I like crowded and I'm an extrovert people and I want to.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they are crowded, and I like crowds; I'm an extrovert and I enjoy that.

Do not use 'prefer in'; use 'prefer' plus noun or plural noun 'urban areas'. Use plural agreement 'they are' for 'areas'. 'Crowded area' needs an article or plural; better to say 'crowds'. 'I'm an extrovert people' is wrong: 'people' conflicts with singular 'I' — use 'I'm an extrovert'. The ending 'and I want to' is incomplete; replace with 'and I enjoy that' to complete the idea.

× I extremely like in the other countries because in the other countries I can more learn about anything about their country culture and then.

✓ I really like other countries because I can learn more about their culture there.

Use 'really' rather than 'extremely like' for natural collocation. Remove unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'like'. 'Can more learn' is incorrect word order; use 'can learn more'. 'Anything about their country culture' is redundant — better 'about their culture'. Add 'there' to indicate location and finish the sentence.