Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify your main idea with a correct topic sentence and fix vocabulary/grammar errors. Avoid contradictions (you said 'I don't like' then 'I do like'). Keep answer concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example. For instance, start with a clear statement: 'Yes, I enjoy taking photos of views.' Then add a reason and an example: 'because they are aesthetic and capture memories; for example, I photographed a sunset at the coast last summer.'

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they are very aesthetic and help me remember places. For example, last summer I photographed a sunset on the coast, and the photo reminds me of that peaceful evening. Also, I often photograph city skylines to compare different architectures.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (topic sentence) and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'both areas' not 'two areas open', 'prefer both' or 'prefer rural areas'). Avoid unclear words like 'boat' that don't fit context. Limit to up to five sentences. For example: 'I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more picturesque; moreover, rural areas often have historic buildings and open spaces.'

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calmer and more picturesque. For example, countryside scenes often have old stone houses and wide fields that feel peaceful. In contrast, urban views are busier and more modern, which I sometimes enjoy but not as much as the countryside.

提案: Start with a direct, clear sentence (e.g., 'I don't have a strong preference; I like views both at home and abroad'). Avoid vague or contradictory phrasing like 'I don't discriminate' followed by 'I don't like it anyway.' Provide a specific reason and an example, using linking words such as 'because' or 'for example.' Keep it natural and concise.

例: I don't have a strong preference; I enjoy photographing views both in my own country and abroad because it depends on the scenery. For example, I loved photographing mountain villages at home and also cityscapes when I visited Tokyo last year.

× I don't like taking picture of a veils because I think they are very aesthetic and it would be a good memory to have them.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of veils because I think they are very aesthetic and it would be a good memory to have them.

The nouns 'picture' and 'a veils' are incorrect in number and article use. 'Taking pictures' should be plural because people usually take multiple photos. 'A veils' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'veils'; it should be simply 'veils' without 'a' or use 'a veil' singular. Suggestion: use 'pictures of veils' or 'a picture of a veil' depending on intended meaning.

× So yeah, I do like that.

✓ So yeah, I do like that.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No correction needed. Included to show context; no structural change required.

× Rural areas, honestly I prefer the two areas open.

✓ Honestly, I prefer rural areas; I like both areas to be open to me.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Rural areas, honestly I prefer the two areas open' mixes ideas and wrong word order. Rewritten to clarify meaning and maintain appropriate tense. Suggestion: state preference clearly: 'I prefer rural areas' or 'I like both areas'.

× I know like it's going to be a infrastructure building and everything.

✓ I know, like, it's going to be an infrastructural building and everything.

The article 'a' before a word beginning with a vowel sound is incorrect; use 'an'. Also 'infrastructure building' is awkward; 'infrastructural building' or simply 'infrastructure' is better. Suggestion: use 'an infrastructural building' or 'an infrastructure project'.

× Rural area is going to look calm and and old so I prefer boat in my own way.

✓ Rural areas tend to look calm and old, so I prefer them in my own way.

Tense and agreement issues: 'Rural area is going to look' is awkward for a habitual or general statement — use 'tend to look'. 'and and' is typo. 'I prefer boat' is incorrect word choice and possibly meant 'both' or 'both in my own way' or 'them'. Corrected to 'I prefer them'. Suggestion: use 'tend to' for general descriptions and ensure plural agreement.

× I don't discriminate, so I don't like it anyway.

✓ I don't discriminate, so I don't mind either way.

'I don't like it anyway' contradicts 'I don't discriminate' and uses pronoun 'it' unclearly. 'Don't mind either way' better expresses neutrality. Suggestion: use clear pronouns and expressions matching intended meaning.

× I can take picture of a view anywhere that I feel like this place look good and this this thing look good.

✓ I can take pictures of a view anywhere if I feel that the place looks good and that things there look good.

Plural 'picture' should be 'pictures' for general ability. Verb agreement: 'this place look' should be 'the place looks' and 'this this thing look' should be 'things there look'. Removed duplicate 'this'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pluralization; use 'if' or 'when' for condition.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

This interjection is fine as a conversational closing; no correction needed.