Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but has some grammatical errors and repetitions. Make it more natural by using accurate plural/singular forms, varying vocabulary, and limiting redundancy. Keep responses concise (max 4–5 sentences) and add one specific detail or brief example to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I do. One of my hobbies is photographing different scenes. I especially enjoy capturing sunsets and local wildlife because the light and colors change so quickly, which challenges me to get the perfect shot.

提案: The answer communicates preference but contains informal/idiomatic phrases and some awkward grammar. Avoid slang or dramatic expressions (e.g., “hold the gun to my head”) and use clear linking words to compare. Give one concise reason and a brief example to support your choice.

例: I generally prefer rural views because they often reflect local traditions and older buildings, which I find fascinating. However, I also like urban scenes for their energy; for instance, city streets offer dynamic street photography with people and modern architecture.

提案: Your response is relevant and personal but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Make sentences more concise and precise (e.g., “countries I haven't been to”). Use linking words like “however” to contrast ideas, and give a specific example of a memorable photograph to add concreteness.

例: I usually prefer photographing places abroad, especially countries I haven’t visited before, because new surroundings create lasting memories. However, recently I’ve begun noticing interesting architectural details in my hometown, such as the old post office with its ornate façade, which I photographed last month.

× One of my hobbies is to take picture of different views.

✓ One of my hobbies is to take pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'take pictures of different views' refers to multiple instances; use plural after 'take' when referring to photographing various scenes. Suggestion: use plural nouns when meaning more than one item.

× I love to take picture of the sunset, the people, animals, nature, everything that I can capture with my camera.

✓ I love to take pictures of the sunset, people, animals, nature, everything that I can capture with my camera.

Same plural issue: 'picture' should be 'pictures' because multiple subjects are listed. Also 'the people' can be 'people' without the definite article when speaking generally. Suggestion: use plural 'pictures' and avoid unnecessary 'the' when referring to people in general.

× I would say I prefer views in rural areas because they hold so much history and it's more interesting than urban areas.

✓ I would say I prefer views in rural areas because they hold so much history and they're more interesting than urban areas.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'rural areas' (plural); use 'they' and 'they're' to match plural subject. Subject-verb agreement requires pronouns and verbs to match number. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× But urban areas are more lively, things happen more.

✓ But urban areas are more lively; more things happen there.

Original sentence is a run-on and has awkward word order. Rewriting with 'more things happen there' clarifies meaning and places adverb 'more' appropriately. Suggestion: separate clauses and place adverbs where they clearly modify the verb.

× So I would say it's a 5050 thing.

✓ So I would say it's a 50-50 thing.

Numeric expression '5050' should be written as '50-50' with a hyphen to represent a split preference. Suggestion: use standard hyphenated form for fractional informal expressions.

× But if you would hold the gun to my head, I was in rural areas.

✓ But if you put a gun to my head, I would choose rural areas.

The conditional sentence is mixed and uses past tense 'was' incorrectly. Use present simple in the if-clause and conditional 'would' in the result: 'If you put a gun to my head, I would choose...' Also 'in rural areas' -> 'rural areas' or 'the countryside' depending on style. Suggestion: follow standard conditional structure: If + present, would + base verb.

× I usually prefer taking pictures in other countries, especially countries that haven't been in before, because then I can capture each moment and I have a memory for life.

✓ I usually prefer taking pictures in other countries, especially countries that I haven't been to before, because then I can capture each moment and have memories for life.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'been' in 'haven't been to before'. Also 'a memory for life' is better as 'memories for life' or 'a memory for life' depending, but plural 'memories' fits 'each moment'. Suggestion: use 'haven't been to' for visiting places and match singular/plural nouns for natural collocation.

× But lately I've also started to appreciate the views in my hometown and look more at buildings and architecture than I have before.

✓ But lately I've also started to appreciate the views in my hometown and to look more at buildings and architecture than I did before.

Comparative reference uses past simple 'did' for 'before' contrast, so 'than I did before' is clearer. Also 'look more at' can be followed by 'to look more at' for parallel structure with 'started to appreciate'. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and use appropriate past reference for comparisons with 'before'.