Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Постарайтесь давать более структурированные и связные ответы: начните с чёткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные детали. Избегайте заполнителей (uh, umm) и повторов, работайте над правильным использованием прилагательных и местоимений. Практикуйте короткие фразы без лишних слов и используйте связки (for example, because, so) для логики.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I find landscapes and cityscapes very beautiful. For example, I often take pictures at sunrise when the light makes colors vivid, and I prefer using simple compositions to highlight shapes. This approach helps me capture striking and emotional images.

提案: Дайте чёткое мнение и подкрепите его конкретным сравнением. Избегайте неуместных слов (aesthetical streaking) и повторов. Используйте связки (on the one hand, on the other hand, because) и конкретные примеры, чтобы ответ звучал ясно и естественно.

例: I like both urban and rural views. On the one hand, cities offer dramatic architecture and dynamic street scenes, which are great for detailed photos. On the other hand, the countryside provides peaceful landscapes and natural light, which work well for wide, calm compositions.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ ясно и кратко, объяснив причину. Избегайте грамматических ошибок в прошедших временах и лишних повторов. Добавьте конкретную деталь о том, какие новые виды вы хотели бы увидеть, чтобы показать глубину ответа.

例: At the moment I prefer views in other countries because I’ve already explored most places at home. For example, I would love to photograph coastal towns and mountain villages abroad to see different architecture and natural scenery, which would inspire me creatively.

× I like taking pictures or different views uh, because it's very beautiful.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they are very beautiful.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'views' which is plural; use 'they are' for plural. Also 'or' should be 'of'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and use correct preposition 'of' when talking about taking pictures of something.

× Also I like taking uh, aesthetical pictures 'cause it's uh, they are very, very beautiful.

✓ Also I like taking aesthetic pictures because they are very, very beautiful.

Use adjective 'aesthetic' instead of 'aesthetical'. Remove conflicting pronouns 'it' and 'they'; use 'they are' to agree with plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use standard adjective forms and ensure pronoun agreement.

× They attract uh, they attractive my umm.

✓ They attract me.

The phrase 'they attractive my' mixes verb and adjective forms and uses incorrect object. Correct verb is 'attract' and object pronoun is 'me'. Suggestion: use simple structure 'They attract me'.

× I like taking pictures or different views uh, because it's very beautiful.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they are very beautiful.

Preposition 'of' is needed with 'pictures of' to indicate the object. 'Or' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'pictures of' to express photographing something.

× I prefer both of them. Classy views in urban areas also so aesthetical, uh, aesthetical streaking and beautiful but uh, rural areas also so simple but it looks cool.

✓ I prefer both. Urban views can be classy and aesthetic and beautiful, but rural views are simple and look cool.

Problems: unnecessary repetition 'of them', awkward word 'aesthetical', incorrect structure 'also so', and singular 'it looks' referring to plural 'rural areas'. Use 'are' for plural and standard adjective 'aesthetic'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use plural verbs to agree with plural nouns, and prefer 'aesthetic'.

× For now, I prefer views in other countries because I am because I live in my country and I I have I had seen all uh views in my country.

✓ For now, I prefer views in other countries because I live in my country and I have seen all the views here.

Redundant words 'because I am because' and tense confusion 'I have I had seen'. Use present perfect 'have seen' to indicate experience up to now. Include article 'the' before 'views'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct present perfect form for past experiences relevant to present.

× So I wanted to watch another Co views in other countries and visit other countries.

✓ So I want to see new views in other countries and visit them.

'Wanted' shifts tense unnecessarily; use present 'want' to match 'For now'. 'Watch another Co views' is ungrammatical — use 'see new views'. Repetition 'in other countries' can be shortened to 'them'. Suggestion: use consistent tense and choose correct verbs: 'see' and 'visit'.