Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and vague words like “soft.” For example, say why photography makes you calm and mention a concrete memory or effect.

例: Yes, I do. I find taking photos very relaxing because it helps me focus on small details, and looking at my pictures later brings back specific memories. For instance, a photo of a coastal sunset reminds me of a peaceful family trip last summer.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar (e.g., “both sides,” “I prefer rural areas”). Replace vague phrases like “come like a home” with clearer expressions such as “feel like home.”

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones. Rural landscapes feel more peaceful and visually attractive, and they remind me of home because of the familiar fields and quiet roads.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear reason why you prefer your country and add a brief example or contrast. Replace sentimental but vague phrases like “motherland of my heart” with clearer reasons (cultural familiarity, memories, language).

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more comfortable with the language and culture, and local landscapes bring back childhood memories. For example, seeing the rice terraces always reminds me of family visits to my grandparents.

× 'Absolutely yes because it fits me more comfortable and calm and uh when I taking photo it's really bring back memories and just soft.'

✓ 'Absolutely. Yes, because it makes me feel more comfortable and calm, and when I take photos it really brings back memories and feels soothing.'

'Errors: incorrect use of verb + -ing after auxiliary and incorrect verb forms. "fits me more comfortable" is ungrammatical: use "make(s) me feel + adjective". "when I taking photo" should be "when I take photos" (simple present for habitual action; plural photos). "it's really bring" should be "it really brings" (subject-verb agreement and present simple). Suggestion: use simple present for habits, use "make(s) me feel" to link verb to adjective, use base form after subject for present tense, and use correct agreement with singular/plural subjects.'

× 'I like both side but more and rural areas because rural areas are just really beautiful and.'

✓ 'I like both sides, but I prefer rural areas because they are really beautiful and feel like home.'

'Errors: "both side" should be plural "both sides". The sentence also lacks a subject for the clause "but more and rural areas"; corrected to "but I prefer rural areas". Also replace the incomplete fragment "and." with "and feel like home." Suggestion: ensure nouns match singular/plural as needed and complete clauses with subjects and verbs.'

× 'To be honest, I I like **** but more I prefer my own country because it's the motherland of my heart and I feel more comforted and confident with my own country and.'

✓ 'To be honest, I like foreign countries, but I prefer my own country because it is the motherland of my heart and I feel more comforted and confident there.'

'Errors: repeated word "I I" and awkward ordering "but more I prefer". Use simple present for preferences: "I prefer". "it's" expanded to "it is" is acceptable; ensure preposition "there" to avoid repetition "with my own country". Remove trailing conjunction "and." Suggestion: avoid repetitions, keep natural word order for preferences, and finish sentences with appropriate pronouns or prepositional phrases.'