Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation sounds and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one specific example with a reason. Limit to up to 3–4 short sentences and avoid filler words like "uh" and "umm."

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like capturing rainbows and sunsets because the colors are vivid and they create a dramatic mood. For instance, a sunset by the ocean often results in warm tones that make the picture more striking.

提案: Be careful with repetition and tense/word form. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid repeating words like "calm" and phrases like "you know."

例: I prefer rural areas. I like them because they are quiet and peaceful, which helps me relax and focus on taking pictures. For example, the open fields and natural light in the countryside make it easier to capture tranquil scenes.

提案: Provide a direct answer about preference (own country or other countries), then support it with a concise example. Remove fillers and vague phrases. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "heavy rainfall," "spectacular waterfalls") and correct grammar ("it has" not "it is").

例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers unique landscapes I know well. For example, Cherrapunji in Northeast India is famous for heavy rainfall and spectacular waterfalls, which create dramatic and photogenic scenery.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when, uh, when there's rain or rainbow is out there.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when there's rain or a rainbow out there.

Use of the article before countable singular noun 'rainbow' is required. Change 'rainbow is out there' to 'a rainbow out there' for natural phrasing and correct noun phrase structure. Also remove the repeated 'when' for conciseness.

× Or umm, maybe a sunset.

✓ Or maybe a sunset.

This fragment is acceptable in spoken language but removing filler 'umm' produces a cleaner sentence. No other grammatical change needed.

× I'm more of a country girl, so I definitely prefer the rural areas because it is very quiet and that serene atmosphere gave me positive vibes.

✓ I'm more of a country girl, so I definitely prefer rural areas because they are very quiet and that serene atmosphere gives me positive vibes.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference errors: 'rural areas' is plural so use 'they are' not 'it is'. The clause about atmosphere describes a present, habitual feeling, so use present simple 'gives' rather than past 'gave'. Adjust pronouns and verb tense to match plurality and present-tense habitual context.

× And you know, it's, it's I feel that calm, calmness there.

✓ And you know, I feel that calmness there.

Redundant and ungrammatical insertion 'it's, it's I feel' should be simplified. Use 'I feel that calmness there' to express the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.

× Talking about my own country, there are certain places where I enjoy the views.

✓ Speaking about my own country, there are certain places where I enjoy the views.

'Talking about' is common in speech but 'Speaking about' is slightly more natural in this context. This is stylistic; grammatical structure remains correct. No change required for preposition, but improved connector suggested for formality.

× For example, there's this place in Northeast India, it is called Cherrapunji where there's umm rain like most of the years.

✓ For example, there's a place in Northeast India called Cherrapunji, where it rains for most of the year.

Run-on and awkward phrasing: combine clauses correctly and fix verb and time expressions. Use 'there's a place ... called Cherrapunji' instead of 'there's this place ... it is called'. Use 'it rains' (present simple repeated action) and 'for most of the year' (correct time expression) rather than 'like most of the years.' Remove filler 'umm.'

× So I definitely love that place.

✓ So I definitely love that place.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included here to show that it fits the context and tense.

× And it also has like spitting waterfalls and you know.

✓ And it also has spectacular waterfalls and so on.

'Spitting waterfalls' is nonstandard and unclear. Replace with an appropriate adjective like 'spectacular' or 'plentiful' depending on intended meaning. Also replace colloquial 'and you know' with 'and so on' or omit for clarity. This preserves tense and fits the descriptive context.