Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, shorten redundant phrases, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "and", "because", "so").

例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often photograph sunrises and sunsets because their colours are unforgettable, and I also like photographing mountain landscapes when I travel. These scenes make me feel peaceful, so I always try to capture them quickly with my camera.

提案: Make the answer direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and examples. Correct vocabulary ("both" not "booth") and grammar ("I grew up" or "I live" instead of "I drop"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example".

例: I prefer views in rural areas to urban ones. I grew up in the countryside, so I love open fields and quiet landscapes because they feel peaceful and offer unique photo opportunities, for example, foggy mornings over rice fields.

提案: Clarify and organize the response: begin with a clear statement (e.g., "I like both"), then give 1–2 specific comparisons with correct names and grammar. Avoid vague phrases; give concise examples and use linking words such as "for instance" or "however".

例: I like views in both my country and other countries. For instance, in my country I enjoy famous sites like the Taj Mahal and coastal beaches, while abroad I appreciated the Blue Mountains in Trinidad for their misty peaks. Each place has its own beauty, so I cannot choose just one.

× Most of the time I click the pictures of the sunset, sunrise and sometimes the mountain views is a very memorable.

✓ Most of the time I take pictures of the sunset and sunrise, and sometimes mountain views are very memorable.

The original sentence has several issues: 'click the pictures' is nonstandard; use 'take pictures'. 'and sometimes the mountain views is a very memorable' has subject-verb disagreement and article misuse. 'Mountain views' is plural so use 'are'. Remove the unnecessary article 'the' before 'mountain views' and use 'very memorable' without 'a'. Improve by: use 'take pictures', match plural subject with plural verb ('views are'), and simplify structure for clarity. Suggested practice: replace informal verbs like 'click' with 'take/photograph', ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, and avoid unnecessary articles.

× So I don't know how to express the feeling when you saw a beautiful nature and I just captured right away in my camera.

✓ So I don't know how to express the feeling when I see beautiful nature, and I just capture it immediately with my camera.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('saw' past vs 'don't know' present) and incorrect noun phrase 'a beautiful nature' (nature is uncountable and needs no article). Also 'captured right away in my camera' is awkward; use 'capture it immediately with my camera'. Fix by using present tense 'see' to match 'don't know', remove the article before 'nature', and use correct object pronoun 'it' and preposition 'with'. Suggested practice: maintain consistent tense within a sentence, treat 'nature' as uncountable, and use common verbs/prepositions for photography (capture/take ... with my camera).

× Like the booth but I drop in the rural area so I prefer that one more and there's a fields and many other things which is most amazing in the rural area.

✓ I prefer the countryside because I grew up in a rural area, so I prefer it more. There are fields and many other things that are most amazing in rural areas.

Problems: 'Like the booth' is unclear; likely meant 'I like the countryside' or 'I prefer rural areas'. 'I drop in the rural area' is incorrect use of verb and tense; use 'grew up in a rural area' or 'live in'. 'there's a fields' mixes singular contraction 'there's' with plural 'fields' and uses wrong article 'a'. Also 'which is most amazing in the rural area' is ungrammatical relative clause and agreement. Fix by using plural agreement ('There are fields'), correct verb choice ('grew up' or 'live'), and consistent references ('rural areas'). Suggested practice: choose clear verbs for life events (grow up, live), match 'there is/are' to singular/plural nouns, and use relative clauses with appropriate verbs and agreement.

× This is the hard question.

✓ This is a hard question.

'the hard question' implies a specific question previously identified; 'a hard question' is more natural when introducing difficulty. Article choice falls under tense/usage context; change 'the' to 'a' for natural present-tense expression. Suggested practice: use 'a' when making a general statement about something not previously defined.

× Like every country has their own beautiful views and lightweight and talk about my home country.

✓ Every country has its own beautiful views, and speaking about my home country,

'their' is a plural pronoun but refers to singular 'every country', so use 'its'. 'lightweight and talk about my home country' is incoherent; likely 'and, to talk about my home country,' or 'and speaking about my home country,'. Fix pronoun agreement and clarify the transition phrase. Suggested practice: use 'every' + singular noun + 'its' for possession, and use clear transition phrases like 'speaking about' or 'to talk about'.

× There's many wonders like Taj Mahal beaches and everything.

✓ There are many wonders, like the Taj Mahal, beaches, and so on.

'There's' is contraction of 'there is' and should not be used with plural 'many wonders'—use 'There are'. Also items need punctuation and articles: 'Taj Mahal' should be preceded by 'the' in many contexts, and list items should be separated. 'and everything' is colloquial; 'and so on' or 'and other attractions' is clearer. Suggested practice: match 'there is/are' to noun number, include articles where appropriate ('the Taj Mahal'), and use clear list separators.

× And when I moved to Trinidad, there's a night of all Blue Mountain tuber Mori.

✓ When I moved to Trinidad, there was a night when the Blue Mountains were all blue.

Tense mismatch: 'when I moved' is past, so use past 'there was' rather than 'there's'. The phrase 'a night of all Blue Mountain tuber Mori' is unintelligible—likely describing when the Blue Mountains appeared blue at night. Use clearer noun and plural agreement: 'Blue Mountains were all blue'. Ensure past tense consistency. Suggested practice: keep tense consistent (past with past), use correct place names ('Blue Mountains'), and phrase descriptive events clearly.

× There's more. So every country has their own.

✓ There is more. So every country has its own.

'There's more' is acceptable colloquially but 'There is more' matches formality. 'every country has their own' uses 'their' with singular 'every country'; use 'its'. Also 'its own' needs an object ('its own attractions' or 'its own beauty'), so complete the thought for clarity. Suggested practice: prefer 'its' after 'every', and complete noun phrases (e.g., 'its own attractions' or 'its own beautiful views').