Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases (e.g. “in the end”), and use correct collocations (e.g. “taking pictures of nature” not “taking pictures of the nature”). Add one specific detail to support your statement and link it logically (use linking words like “because” or “so”).

例: I love taking pictures of different views because I'm a mountain climber and I often encounter dramatic landscapes. For example, I frequently photograph alpine lakes and pine forests because the light at sunrise highlights their colors, so I try to capture that moment.

提案: Give a direct, confident answer first, then support it with a brief reason. Avoid confusing jokes that contradict your point and watch sentence structure (e.g. “I will go with urban” is awkward). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect your reason.

例: I prefer rural views because, as a mountain climber, I enjoy natural landscapes and quiet surroundings. For instance, rural areas have open trails and clear viewpoints, so they suit my hobby better than busy cityscapes.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I prefer views in my own country”) and give two specific supporting reasons. Avoid vague phrases like “you will see anything” and correct phrasing (“prefer my own country” not “prefer with my own”). Use linking words such as “because” and give a short example.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Turkey offers a huge variety of landscapes, from mountains to coasts. For example, I like photographing both the turquoise Aegean beaches and the rugged peaks of the Kaçkar Mountains, so I rarely feel the need to travel abroad for scenic views.

× Yes, I like checking pictures of different views because I'm a mountain climber after all.

✓ Yes, I like looking at pictures of different views because I'm a mountain climber after all.

The verb phrase 'like checking pictures' is awkward; native speakers use 'look at' or 'looking at' when referring to viewing pictures. This is a verb + -ing form issue because 'checking' implies inspection rather than viewing for pleasure. Use 'looking at' to match the intended meaning and natural collocation: 'like looking at pictures'.

× I see a lot of trees, mountains, lakes and in the end I am obsessed with taking pictures of the nature.

✓ I see a lot of trees, mountains, and lakes, and in the end I am obsessed with taking pictures of nature.

'the nature' is incorrect here; 'nature' when referring to the natural world is usually uncountable and does not take the definite article. This is an article/definite article error. Remove 'the' to produce the correct phrase 'pictures of nature'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I think the answer is obvious because I state that I'm a mountain climber, that of course I will go with urban.

✓ I think the answer is obvious because I said that I'm a mountain climber, so of course I will choose rural.

Several issues: 'I state' is unnatural in this context; 'I said' or 'I am' fits better. 'I will go with urban' is incorrect use of adjective 'urban' without a noun or correct choice verb and also wrong pronoun/reference to preference. This falls under incorrect use of pronouns/word choice. Use 'choose rural' to correctly express preference, and 'so' to link cause and effect. Also change tense to past 'said' or keep 'I'm' consistently; here 'said' fits the spoken context.

× Oh, I'm just joking, of course I'm going with the rural areas.

✓ Oh, I'm just joking; of course I prefer rural areas.

'I'm going with the rural areas' is a non-idiomatic choice of verb and article use. Use 'prefer rural areas' or 'I prefer the rural areas' depending on emphasis. This is categorized under incorrect pronoun/word usage and article choice; 'rural areas' does not need 'the' here. Use a semicolon or comma for clarity in speech transcription.

× I'm living in Turkey and I can say confidently that my country is beautiful.

✓ I live in Turkey, and I can say confidently that my country is beautiful.

The present continuous 'I'm living' is unusual for a permanent state like residence; use the simple present 'I live' to indicate a habitual or long-term fact. This is a present tense issue: prefer simple present for states.

× You will see anything, mountains, seas, natural beauties and of course the other countries have a lot of good resources, but I would prefer with my own.

✓ You can see mountains, seas, and natural attractions, and of course other countries have many good resources, but I would prefer my own country.

This sentence has multiple structural problems: 'You will see anything' is incorrect — use 'You can see' or 'There are' for listing features. 'Natural beauties' is non-idiomatic; use 'natural attractions' or 'natural beauty'. 'The other countries' should be 'other countries' without 'the'. 'I would prefer with my own' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I would prefer my own country.' These are sentence structure and word choice errors; revise to separate ideas with clear clauses and proper collocations.