Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., 'I have' → 'I do', 'different type of sceneries' → 'different kinds of scenery'). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I love photographing different kinds of scenery whenever I travel. For example, last year I visited Himachal Pradesh and took many photos of the mountains and hill stations, which were memorable for me and my family.

提案: Clarify your preference and give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid self-contradiction (you said you prefer rural areas but then referenced 'urban areas'). Use concise sentences and specific vocabulary (e.g., 'greenery', 'scenic spots').

例: I prefer rural areas because they have more greenery and peaceful landscapes. For instance, villages often have open fields and traditional houses that make for beautiful photographs, whereas cities tend to be crowded and less scenic.

提案: Be direct and avoid filler words. State your current preference, give a specific past example, then briefly mention future plans. Correct common errors: 'watch view' → 'see views', 'my nation' → 'my country', and combine short fragments into full sentences.

例: I usually prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and can travel there easily. For example, last year I visited several hill stations in Himachal Pradesh and took many photos of the mountains with my family. However, I also hope to visit other countries in the future to photograph different landscapes and gain new experiences.

× Definitely I have.

✓ Definitely I do.

The student used 'I have' without an object, which is incomplete and incorrect here. The intended meaning is affirmation, so 'I do' is correct in present simple. This fixes a present tense usage error and matches the question context. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 6)

× I am quite passionate about taking pictures of different type of sceneries whenever I go outside from my nation.

✓ I am quite passionate about taking pictures of different types of scenery whenever I go outside my country.

'type' should be plural 'types' to match 'different'; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun so use singular form; 'from my nation' is unnatural, use 'my country' and omit 'outside' preceding 'my'. This corrects pluralization and noun choice. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1)

× I remembered clearly last year I went to the Himachal Pradesh and that time I clicked number of pictures of the mountains and hill station.

✓ I remember clearly that last year I went to Himachal Pradesh and at that time I took a number of pictures of the mountains and the hill station.

Use present simple 'I remember' for a memory; 'the Himachal Pradesh' should be 'Himachal Pradesh' without 'the'; 'clicked' is colloquial for 'took' when referring to photos; 'number of pictures' needs 'a' before it; add 'the' before 'hill station' when referring to a specific place. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5)

× That was very impressive moment for me as well As for my family members.

✓ That was a very impressive moment for me and for my family members as well.

Missing article 'a' before 'very impressive moment'; 'as well As' has capitalization and repetition errors; use 'and ... as well' for correct conjunction and smoother sentence structure. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 16)

× Well, I give more preference to the rural areas as compared to the urban areas.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

'Give more preference to' is wordy and awkward; use 'prefer X to Y'. Keep 'areas' consistent. This simplifies and corrects comparative expression. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 25)

× The main reason why I like it urban areas because because they are much greenery as compared to the urban areas.

✓ The main reason I like rural areas is that they are much greener than urban areas.

Remove extraneous 'it' and duplicate 'because'; 'much greenery' is incorrect — use comparative adjective 'greener' with 'much' or 'much greener than'. Use 'is that' to introduce a reason. This fixes sentence structure and adjective usage. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× Apart from this, there is also number of beautiful views as well as amazing where whenever we can click pictures, uh more beautiful.

✓ Apart from that, there are also a number of beautiful and amazing views where we can take even more beautiful pictures.

'There is also number' should be 'there are a number of' for plural; 'views as well as amazing' is jumbled — combine adjectives 'beautiful and amazing views'; 'click pictures' better expressed as 'take pictures'; remove filler 'uh' and reorder for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 14)

× I usually like to watch view in my own nation, uh, whenever I get a chance.

✓ I usually like to see views in my own country whenever I get a chance.

'Watch view' is incorrect collocation — use 'see views' or 'look at views'; 'nation' better as 'country'; remove filler 'uh'. This fixes verb-noun collocation and article usage. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13)

× I remembered clearly last year went to the Himachal Pradesh and that time I visited number of a hill station which are well known in my country and there I clicked many pictures with my family members as well as also of the mountains.

✓ I remember clearly that last year I went to Himachal Pradesh and visited a number of hill stations that are well known in my country, and there I took many pictures with my family and of the mountains.

Use 'I remember' for a current recollection; remove 'the' before Himachal Pradesh; 'visited number of a hill station' reordered to 'visited a number of hill stations'; plural agreement ('hill stations that are'); 'clicked' -> 'took'; remove redundant 'as well as also'. This addresses tense, pluralization, and verb choice. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5)

× In future, I would like to also visit another country in order to click pictures and view watching view of another country.

✓ In the future, I would also like to visit another country to take pictures and see its views.

Add article 'the' before 'future'; 'would like to also' -> 'would also like to'; 'click pictures' -> 'take pictures'; 'view watching view' is ungrammatical — use 'see its views'. Simplify phrasing to express future intention correctly. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 7)

× And it will. Be a great experience for me.

✓ And it will be a great experience for me.

The period splits the sentence improperly creating a fragment. Combine into one sentence 'it will be'. This fixes sentence structure and punctuation. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 23)