Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The answer is unclear and not relevant to the question. Give a direct, relevant topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then add 1–2 brief supporting details (what kinds of views you like, why, or when you take photos). Keep it natural and coherent, avoiding unrelated words. Use linking words such as "because", "for example" or "so" if you add details.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me notice small details. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to capture the colours and reflections, and I sometimes take close-up shots of interesting architecture.

提案: The answer is unintelligible and does not address the question. Start with a clear preference (urban or rural), then give one or two specific reasons and an example, using linking words like "because" or "for instance". Keep the response concise and relevant.

例: I prefer rural views, because I enjoy natural scenery and quiet surroundings. For instance, I like photographing mountain landscapes and lakes since they offer dramatic light and peaceful compositions.

提案: The answer is off-topic and unclear. State your preference directly (same country or abroad), then explain why with specific details (e.g., familiarity, variety, different architecture). Use linking phrases such as "however", "because", or "for example" and avoid unrelated phrases.

例: I prefer views in other countries because travelling lets me see different architectures and landscapes that I can't find at home. For example, I enjoy photographing historic European streets and colourful markets that contrast with the scenery in my country.

× Yes, I don't like recruitment translate to pollution benefit.

✓ Yes, I don't like taking pictures that translate into pollution or that harm the environment.

The original sentence is incoherent and lacks proper sentence structure; words are incorrectly ordered and some are irrelevant ('recruitment' and 'translate' used incorrectly). This is a sentence structure error (type 26). Suggestion: decide the intended meaning (dislike that photography causes pollution), use a clear subject and verb, and use correct verbs and prepositions (e.g., 'translate into' or 'cause').

× Mountains viewers A Robotics 3.

✓ I prefer mountain views in rural areas.

The original is a sequence of unrelated words and lacks grammatical structure; it's unclear and fails to form a coherent sentence (type 26). Suggestion: express the preference clearly with subject, verb and object: 'I prefer mountain views' or 'I like viewing mountains in rural areas.'

× I would like to know my temperature. From lyrics to disruptive American culture.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures.

The original contains unrelated fragments and no clear connection to the question; it's ungrammatical and fragmented (type 26). Suggestion: respond directly to the question with a complete sentence indicating preference and reason, using appropriate tense and cohesive phrasing.