Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 의도는 명확하지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 눈에 띕니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고 중복 표현(예: "usually I usually")을 제거하세요. 또한 'dessert camera'와 같은 단어 선택 오류를 바로잡고, 과거·현재 시제 혼용을 피하며 한두 개의 구체적 예시(예: 어떤 풍경, 어떤 상황에서 사진을 찍는지)를 추가해 보세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 흐름을 부드럽게 만드세요.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually bring my compact camera when I go out, and I stop to take photos whenever I find an interesting scene. For example, I like to capture sunsets and city skylines because the light and colors change quickly.

提案: 의미는 전달되지만 발음·단어 선택(예: 'ruler'→'rural')과 문장 구성에서 오류가 있습니다. 말하기 도중의 망설임과 중복('and and')을 줄이세요. 직접적인 토픽 문장으로 시작한 뒤 이유를 명확히 설명하고 구체적 예시(예: 산, 호수, 농촌 풍경)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 연결어로 이유를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

例: I prefer rural areas because I love nature and peaceful landscapes. In my daily life I rarely see open fields or forests, so I enjoy photographing mountains, lakes, and traditional villages when I travel.

提案: 생각은 분명하지만 문법(예: 'another countries'→'other countries')과 표현의 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 간결한 주제 문장으로 시작하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 문화 경험과 풍경의 차이를 예로 들어 비교하면 설득력이 높아집니다. 문장을 2~3개로 유지하면서 이유와 예시를 연결어로 잇는 연습을 하세요.

例: I like views in my own country, but I prefer visiting other countries because I enjoy traveling and experiencing different cultures. For instance, I want to photograph traditional markets and architecture abroad, which are very different from the scenery at home.

× So usually I usually bring my dessert camera for taking a picture of different view.

✓ So usually I bring my compact camera to take pictures of different views.

The sentence misuses 'for taking' and has noun/adjective errors. Use the base verb 'to take' after 'to' for purpose and use plural 'pictures' and 'views'. Also 'dessert camera' is likely wrong word choice; 'compact camera' is appropriate. Improve by using 'to take' for purpose and correct noun forms.

× So when I see or watch the previous spot, I just stand and take a picture.

✓ So when I see a nice spot, I just stop and take a picture.

'See or watch the previous spot' is ungrammatical. Use 'see a nice spot' and 'stop' rather than 'stand' to express pausing to take a photo. 'Take a picture' is fine but 'a picture of the spot' could be added. Improve by using natural collocations.

× Umm I like photo them but if I have to choose only one I think ruler area because I really like nature so and and in my daily life it is hard to see nature or rural area.

✓ Umm I like taking photos of both, but if I have to choose only one I think rural areas because I really like nature and in my daily life it is hard to see natural scenery.

'I like photo them' is incorrect pronoun and verb use; use 'taking photos of both'. 'Ruler area' is a misspelling of 'rural area' and should be plural 'rural areas' to match 'both'. Remove filler 'so and and' and use 'natural scenery' or 'nature'. Improve by correcting verb form, pronoun reference, spelling, and plurality.

× I also like my own country view but I want to see another countries because I really like travel and I want to experience a variety of culture and other country.

✓ I also like the views in my own country, but I want to see other countries because I really like traveling and I want to experience a variety of cultures.

Use 'the views in my own country' or 'my country's views'. 'Another countries' is wrong: use 'other countries' (plural). 'I really like travel' should be 'I really like traveling' (gerund). 'A variety of culture and other country' should be 'a variety of cultures'. Improve by correcting articles, plural forms, and gerund usage.