Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve anlaşılır fakat dil bilgisi hataları, gereksiz tekrarlar ve belirsiz ifadeler var. Cümle yapısını düzeltin (örn. 'I always take' ve 'the architecture is impressive' gibi), gereksiz kelimeleri çıkarın ve 2–3 kısa destekleyici detay ekleyin. Bağlaçlarla (because, so, for example) akışı güçlendirin. Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it makes me feel happy and free. I especially like urban scenes and tall buildings, as their shapes often look dramatic. For example, I often take shots of city skylines at sunset to capture the light and contrast.

提案: Cevap doğrudan ama dilbilgisi ve akıcılık sorunları var; tekrar eden ve belirsiz ifadeler mevcut ('a lot of things'). Daha spesifik nedenler verin (örneğin mimari çeşitlilik, gece manzaraları) ve bağlaçlarla mantıksal akış sağlayın. Cümle sayısını 2–3 ile sınırlayın.

例: I prefer urban areas because they offer more architectural variety and interesting skylines. For instance, my city has modern skyscrapers and historic buildings close together, which gives me more options for photography.

提案: Cevapta anlatım bozuklukları ve dil bilgisi hataları var ('a lot of. Governments' gibi). İfadenizi netleştirin: neden ülkenizi tercih ettiğinizi açıkça belirtin (kültürel ve tarihi zenginlikler gibi) ve bir veya iki örnek verin. Gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının ve 2–3 cümleye uyun.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it is rich in cultural and historical sites. For example, there are ancient monuments and traditional neighborhoods that show our history and make great subjects for photos.

× The nature and the architecture is very high in my city.

✓ Nature and architecture are very prominent in my city.

The phrase 'the nature' and 'the architecture' is unnatural here; 'nature' and 'architecture' are uncountable/abstract and do not need 'the'. 'Is very high' is incorrect because 'nature and architecture' is a compound subject requiring plural verb 'are', and 'high' is not the right adjective for prominence; use 'prominent' or 'noticeable'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, use plural agreement and a more appropriate adjective. Grammar problem type ID:17

× I always taking pictures of urban views and tall buildings etcetera.

✓ I always take pictures of urban views and tall buildings, etc.

The structure 'I always taking' is incorrect because after a subject you need the base verb for simple present habit: 'I always take'. Using present participle 'taking' requires an auxiliary (am/is/are) for continuous tense (e.g., 'I am always taking'), but the simple present is appropriate here. Also use a comma before 'etc.' and avoid 'etcetera' in speech. Suggestion: use simple present 'take' for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID:10

× I prefer urban areas because in my city there is a lot of places that you can see amazing views and I am living in Eastwich so there is a lot of things.

✓ I prefer urban areas because in my city there are a lot of places where you can see amazing views, and I live in Eastwich so there are many things to see.

Errors: 'there is a lot of places' uses singular 'is' with plural 'places' and 'a lot of' is followed by plural noun but requires plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'That you can see amazing views' should use 'where' to refer to places. 'I am living' is unnatural for a stable fact; use simple present 'I live'. 'There is a lot of things' again mismatches 'is' with plural 'things' and 'a lot of' with plural requires 'are' or better 'many things'. Suggestion: use 'there are' with plural nouns, use 'where' for places, and use simple present for permanent situations. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I prefer views in my country because it has a lot of cultural places and my country has been home for a lot of. Governments, it has so much historical places.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it has many cultural sites and my country has been home to many governments; it also has so many historical places.

Problems: 'a lot of cultural places' is acceptable but 'places' is better as 'sites'; 'a lot of.' followed by 'Governments' is broken and capitalizing 'Governments' is wrong. 'Has been home for' should be 'has been home to'. 'So much historical places' mixes uncountable quantifier 'much' with plural 'places'—use 'many' or 'so many'. Suggestion: use 'many' with plural countable nouns, use 'home to' for institutions that were based in a country, fix sentence fragments and capitalization, and combine clauses clearly. Grammar problem type ID:27