Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ хороший по содержанию, но требуется улучшить грамматику и естественность речи. Уберите лишние слова, согласуйте времена (например, present simple вместо past для устойчивого факта), и используйте связки для плавного перехода между предложениями. Также избегайте повторов («took photos» можно заменить синонимами).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel, because they help me remember special moments. For instance, when I visited Paris I photographed the city’s landmarks and street scenes to capture the atmosphere.

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки, неестественные выражения и незавершённое предложение. Нужно четко сформулировать главную мысль (topic sentence), затем пояснить причину с помощью связок (because, for example) и привести конкретный пример. Избегайте словесных поворотов вроде «give me more thoughts to think about it».

例: To be honest, I prefer photographing urban areas because cities offer more diverse architecture and monuments. For example, I like capturing historic buildings and lively streets, which often tell interesting stories.

提案: Ответ расплывчатый, с повторениями и многочисленными грамматическими ошибками. Нужно использовать структуру «On the one hand... On the other hand...», согласовывать артикли и формы глаголов, убирать повторы («big, big culture»). Дайте конкретные причины и примеры для каждой стороны выбора.

例: It's a difficult question. On the one hand, I prefer photographing views in my own country because Russia has vast and diverse landscapes and rich cultural sights. On the other hand, I also enjoy photographing places abroad to discover new scenery and perspectives.

× Oh yes, I really enjoyed taking photos of new places, especially when I'm traveling because they helped me remember special moments in my life.

✓ Oh yes, I really enjoy taking photos of new places, especially when I'm traveling because they help me remember special moments in my life.

The student mixed past and present tenses inconsistently. Use present tense 'enjoy' and 'help' to match the habitual action 'when I'm traveling'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual or general actions by using simple present (I enjoy, they help).

× Oh, honestly I prefer to take in the photo in urban areas because I think that some cities views give me more thoughts to think about it and there are a lot of monuments and.

✓ Oh, honestly I prefer to take photos in urban areas because I think that some city views give me more things to think about and there are a lot of monuments.

Errors: 'take in the photo' incorrect preposition and noun form; use 'take photos in'. 'Cities views' should be singular noun with possessive or adjective: 'city views'. 'Give me more thoughts to think about it' is redundant; use 'more things to think about'. Trailing 'and.' was incomplete; remove or finish the sentence. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and simpler phrasing (take photos in, city views give me things to think about).

× Oh, actually, it's not a easy question for me, because on the one hand I prefer to taking a photo in my own country because it's Russia and it's very large and big, big culture of country with the big culture.

✓ Oh, actually, it's not an easy question for me, because on the one hand I prefer to take photos in my own country because Russia is very large and has a rich culture.

Errors: 'a easy' needs 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Prefer to taking' should be 'prefer to take' (infinitive). 'It's Russia' is acceptable but clearer as 'Russia is'. 'Very large and big, big culture of country with the big culture' is redundant and awkward; correct to 'very large and has a rich culture'. Suggestion: use correct article 'an', use infinitive after 'prefer', avoid repetition and use concise descriptive phrase.