Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and grammatical: answer directly with a full sentence, avoid unnatural pauses and fragmented phrases, and expand slightly with a short reason or example. Keep it under 5 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views when I travel because I like capturing memorable landscapes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to remember the atmosphere of a place.

提案: Correct mistakes and be specific: use the right nouns (views, not viewers), fix tense and grammar, avoid vague phrases like “green colored ribs,” and give a clear reason with one linking word. Keep responses concise and coherent.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because natural scenery helps me relax. For example, wide green fields and forests calm me after a busy week, so I often go hiking to enjoy those scenes.

提案: Be grammatically accurate and clearer: say 'other countries' or name a region correctly (e.g., European countries). Explain briefly why with a specific contrast, and avoid negative or absolute claims about your country—be precise and polite.

例: I usually prefer views in other countries, such as the dramatic mountains and rivers found in many European countries, because they offer different landscapes from what I see in Japan. However, Japan also has beautiful scenery, like Mount Fuji and coastal areas, which I appreciate too.

× Yes, I love to go traveling and take beautiful pictures of. Scenery. I.

✓ Yes, I love to go traveling and take beautiful pictures of scenery.

The original has fragmented sentences and incorrect punctuation splitting 'scenery' and leaving an isolated 'I'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and remove the unnecessary period. Also use 'take pictures of scenery' rather than 'take beautiful pictures of scenery' for natural phrasing; 'beautiful' is optional. Suggestion: keep subject and verbs together and avoid unnecessary sentence breaks.

× I prefer the viewers in rural areas because the natural scenery helped me to feel relaxed and. The green colored ribs are very relaxing.

✓ I prefer the views in rural areas because the natural scenery helps me feel relaxed, and the green-colored fields are very soothing.

Problems include wrong noun 'viewers' instead of 'views' (pronoun/noun misuse) and tense/agreement issues. This falls under incorrect use of words/pronouns (ID 12) and also subject-verb agreement (ID 27) for 'scenery helped/me feel' -> 'scenery helps me feel'. 'Green colored ribs' is incorrect vocabulary; likely intended 'green-colored fields'. Also remove the stray period and join clauses with correct conjunction. Suggestions: use correct nouns ('views'), ensure present tense for general preferences ('helps me feel'), hyphenate compound adjective 'green-colored' and choose appropriate noun ('fields' or 'hills').

× I prefer the magnificent views of mountains and rivers in Europe country.

✓ I prefer the magnificent views of mountains and rivers in European countries.

Using 'Europe country' is incorrect; 'European countries' or 'Europe' should be used. This is an incorrect use of noun/pronoun form (ID 12). Also 'views of mountains and rivers in European countries' is more natural. Suggestion: use the adjective 'European' to modify 'countries' or simply say 'in Europe'. Note: keep plural 'countries' if referring to multiple places.

× My country Japan is not so big area so it can't provide.

✓ My country, Japan, is not a very large country, so it cannot provide such views.

Original lacks articles and has incomplete clause 'so it can't provide'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and also article errors (ID 22). Add commas around appositive 'Japan', use 'a very large country' with indefinite article, and complete the idea by specifying 'such views'. Use 'cannot' or 'can't' consistently. Suggestion: include necessary articles and finish the clause to express what 'it' cannot provide.