Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng câu chủ đề và ngữ pháp. Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng; sử dụng thì đúng (hiện tại đơn cho thói quen). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể bằng cách mô tả những gì bạn thấy (màu sắc, ánh sáng, thành phần) và kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I often photograph landscapes, focusing on colours and natural light, especially when I work by the river. For example, I like capturing reflections in the water and the contrast between bright skies and dark trees.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp, phát âm và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (I prefer ...), sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, so). Tránh dịch sát từ tiếng Việt và dùng từ phù hợp (quiet atmosphere, fresh air).

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in the mountains. The countryside has a peaceful atmosphere and fresh air, so it helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Trình bày ý chính rõ ràng và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng. Dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn và cụ thể (I prefer X because...). Nêu ví dụ cụ thể về trải nghiệm mới bạn muốn có và dùng từ chính xác (memories, experiences, relax).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new places and cultures. For instance, I would love to photograph historic streets in Europe or vibrant markets in Asia to create new memories and unique experiences.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views such as colours, light in the milestone or landscape sceneries.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views such as colors and light in the mist or landscape sceneries.

Student used 'milestone' incorrectly; likely meant 'mist' and 'landscape sceneries' is awkward but acceptable. Also 'such as colours, light in the milestone or landscape sceneries' has coordination problems; suggestions: use 'such as colors and light in the mist' and prefer 'landscapes' over 'landscape sceneries'. Problem type: 8 (Verb + -ing form) applies because 'taking' is correct but surrounding phrasing needs clearer noun coordination.

× Sometime I working at the river, I often, uh, capture, uh, the, the landscape surround us.

✓ Sometimes I work at the river; I often capture the surrounding landscape.

Errors: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb), 'I working' lacks auxiliary verb 'am' or should use simple present 'I work'. 'Surround us' should be 'surrounding' as an adjective or 'that surrounds us'. Suggestion: use 'Sometimes I work at the river' and 'the surrounding landscape'. Problem type: 10 (Verb in the present participle form) because 'working' was misused without auxiliary and 'surrounding' should be used as adjective.

× Eyes for Riverview and rural where area because I was born in the mountain Asia into mountain in a rural area I have quite atmosphere and fast air to relax after a busy day and have a quiet.

✓ I prefer riverside and rural areas because I was born in the mountains of Asia. In the rural area I enjoy the quiet atmosphere and fresh air to relax after a busy day.

Multiple pronoun and word choice errors: 'Eyes for Riverview' is unintelligible; likely 'I prefer riverside'. 'where area' is wrong. 'I was born in the mountain Asia into mountain in a rural area' should be 'I was born in the mountains of Asia'. 'fast air' should be 'fresh air'. 'have a quiet' should be 'enjoy the quiet'. Suggestion: split into two clear sentences and replace incorrect pronouns and nouns. Problem type: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns).

× I ask forever views, uh, in another country because I like uh, new, uh, places or I want to go, uh, different destination, uh, in my life.

✓ I ask for views in another country because I like new places and want to visit different destinations in my life.

'I ask forever views' is ungrammatical; likely 'I ask for views' or better 'I prefer views in another country'. 'different destination' should be plural 'different destinations'. Maintain present simple: 'I like' and 'I want'. Suggestion: use 'I prefer' or 'I like' and pluralize nouns appropriately. Problem type: 6 (Present tense issue).

× I want to try new thing and super rest new memory or new experiences for my life.

✓ I want to try new things and create lasting memories and new experiences in my life.

Errors: 'new thing' should be plural 'new things'; 'super rest new memory' is ungrammatical — likely 'create lasting memories'. 'or' is used incorrectly to connect nouns. Suggestion: use 'try new things', 'create lasting memories', and 'new experiences'. Problem type: 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).